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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (Cam 14 test 1) v. 141 v.65

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. (Cam 14 test 1) v. 141 v. 65
It is true that there is a group of people who do the jobs and live their life without satisfaction and not interested to improve their living standards. However, there is a group of people who always try to be in well being by their continuous efforts. In my opinion, it is always better to work harder and be happier rather than adjusting with the negative energies. On the one hand, if persons learn to find happiness and can able to control their mind in any situation, then they will be happy and can enjoy their life in any situation. Moreover, it is always better to adjust to the environments as most of the time we cannot control or get away from the negative atmosphere. For instance, most of the employees who do the job in the IT company are able to ignore the pressure from the management and enjoy the work what they do even though they are paid less. They learned how to find happiness in any of the situation. On the other hand, being in an area without respect and satisfaction often make the individuals move away. They always ready to learn and crack the negative atmosphere. Additionally, individuals take challenges in their life and always like to be live in a serene mood by reaching in a stable position. For example, the famous cricket Dhoni started his profession as a TTR and later quit from that field when he felt discomfort with the job. Later, he joined the Indian cricket team and now he is the captain of the team. In conclusion, even if some people are happy to adjust and find positive energy any time, I believe, for actual well being, it is better to be in a peaceful environment and work hard to achieve it.
It is true that there is a group of
people
who do the jobs and
live
their life without satisfaction and not interested to
improve
their living standards.
However
, there is a group of
people
who always try to be in
well being
by their continuous efforts. In my opinion, it is always better to work harder and be happier
rather
than adjusting with the
negative
energies.

On the one hand, if persons learn to find happiness and
can able to
control their mind in any situation, then they will be happy and can enjoy their life in any situation.
Moreover
, it is always better to adjust to the environments as most of the time we cannot control or
get
away from the
negative
atmosphere.
For instance
, most of the employees who do the job in the IT
company
are able to
ignore
the pressure from the management and enjoy the work what they do
even though
they
are paid
less. They learned how to find happiness in any of the situation.

On the other hand
, being in an area without respect and satisfaction
often
make
the individuals
move
away. They always ready to learn and crack the
negative
atmosphere.
Additionally
, individuals take challenges in their life and always like to be
live
in a serene mood by reaching in a stable position.
For example
, the
famous
cricket
Dhoni
started
his profession as a TTR and later quit from that field when he felt discomfort with the job. Later, he
joined
the Indian cricket team and
now
he is the captain of the team.

In conclusion
, even if
some
people
are happy to adjust and find
positive
energy any time, I believe, for actual
well being
, it is better to be in a peaceful environment and work
hard
to achieve it.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. (Cam 14 test 1) v. 141 v. 65

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