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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these view and give your own opinion. v. 134 v.58

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations v. 134 v. 58
It is clear that our life always consists of many problems and bad things. While some people believe that those things can be acceptable, other argue that actions must be taken to raise such circumstances. I tend to agree with the latter argument and in this essay I will discuss both sides of the topic. On the one hand, there are various reasons why people believe that permission for awful situation is all for the best. This is because they may assert that people do not have a right to choose their life conditions or some think that lack of money leads to inconvenient studying, therefore having a good job become hard. From my perspective, agreement bad conditions help people becoming happy and optimistic, due to the comparisons their positions with the others are not appeared. To take one example, a miserable person can also live in happiness if he does not think of the rich. In spite of these arguments, I believe that people should try their best to improve their unlucky cases. In my opinion, any challenge people encounter is a chance to develop their abilities. Instead of avoiding thoughts about better things, people can try to enhance their conditions, by doing that they will learn a lot of things. To illustrate, if a tough problem is solved, it will give us the experience for the next time. In conclusion, although acceptance the poor situation makes people feel easy to live, I personally encourage the endeavour to raise them.
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that our life always consists of
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many
problems and
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bad
things. While
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some
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people
believe that those things can be acceptable, other argue that actions
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must
be taken
to raise such circumstances. I tend to
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agree
with the latter argument and in this essay I will discuss both sides of the topic.

On the one hand, there are various reasons why
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people
believe that permission for awful situation is all for the best. This is
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because
they may assert that
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people
do not have a right to choose their life conditions or
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some
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think
that lack of money leads to inconvenient studying,
therefore
having a
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good
job become
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hard
. From my perspective, agreement
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bad
conditions
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help
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people
becoming happy and optimistic, due to the comparisons their positions with the others are not appeared. To take one example, a miserable person can
also
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live
in happiness if he does not
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think
of the rich.

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In spite of
these arguments, I believe that
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people
should try their best to
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improve
their unlucky cases. In my opinion, any challenge
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people
encounter is a chance to develop their abilities.
Instead
of avoiding thoughts about better things,
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people
can try to enhance their conditions, by doing that they will learn
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a lot of
things. To illustrate, if a tough problem
is solved
, it will give us the experience for the
next
time.

In conclusion
, although acceptance the poor situation
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makes
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people
feel easy to
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live
, I
personally
encourage the
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endeavour
to raise them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations v. 134 v. 58

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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