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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v. 117 v.56

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations. v. 117 v. 56
Several people trust that bad position is better to accept. This can be with lack of money or unsatisfying with the job. Few argue that improving those positions is profitable for them. I think people should accept it first then they might look for a job that will matter. Some idea relates to the money issue. First of all, many people state that accepting a bad position overwhelmed them. Every aspect is tough for solving in their own view. However, folks should realise the thing and feel positive about that. ”How can this Environment will help? ” They have to ask this. For example, if any person fails in a subject and blaming himself. It is not the perfect way to see things clearly. He has to realise that failure is the process to become successful. By this mindset he can improve in the next time. Lastly, it is also recommend that is to believe these tough situations will go away and something much better will come. Besides that, positive thinking is the root of all good qualities of your present time. For example, if a man did a job interview and he did well. But, his results will come after a few days. It is normal to feel anxious or overwhelm for that. However, he can think positive and peace with the present situation and it matters the most. In conclusion, it can be said that no man in this world is living without bad situation. Probably, everyone should be proactive with all situations and courage enough to face it. We should never expect a life without problems, instead we have to wish for good problems that can be solved.
Several
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people
trust that
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bad
position is better to accept. This can be with lack of money or unsatisfying with the job. Few argue that improving those positions is profitable for them. I
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think
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people
should accept it
first
then they might look for a job that will matter.
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Some
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idea
relates to the money issue.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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many
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people
state that accepting a
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bad
position overwhelmed them. Every aspect is tough for solving in their
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own
view.
However
, folks should
Possible spelling mistake. 'realise' is British English.
realise
the thing and feel
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positive
about that.
There should be a space after a closing quote.
”How
can this Environment will
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help
? ” They
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have to
ask this.
For example
, if any person fails in a subject and blaming himself. It is not the perfect way to
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see
things
clearly
. He
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
Possible spelling mistake. 'realise' is British English.
realise
that failure is the process to become successful. By this mindset he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
in the
next
time.

Lastly
, it is
also
Consider using a past participle here: "recommended".
recommend
that is
to believe these tough
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situations
will go away and something much better will
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come
.
Besides
that,
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positive
thinking is the root of all
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good
qualities of your present time.
For example
, if a
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man
did a job
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
interview and
he did well.
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But
, his results will
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come
after a few days. It is normal to feel anxious or overwhelm for that.
However
, he can
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think
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positive
and peace with the present
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
and it matters the most.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that no
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man
in this world is living without
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bad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
.
Probably
, everyone should be proactive with all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situations
and courage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to face it. We should never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
a life without problems,
instead
we
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have to
wish for
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good
problems that can
be solved
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations. v. 117 v. 56

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
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