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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v. 100 v.55

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 100 v. 55
People have different attitudes toward a bad situation. While it has some benefits to accept such a bad condition, I believe trying to improve the situation is better. There are various reasons why some people choose to accept the situation, which they not prefer. First, some situation cannot be changed. For example, I remember when my grandmother passed away, I could not recover from the negative emotion, the only way to fix it is to accept the fact. Second, people who refuse to accept, may need to face numbers of risks. Third, the damages they get physically and mentally will be much bigger than the previous, if they try to shift the situation but failed. Although it is dangerous to improve the status, the merits outweighs the drawbacks. Initially, the emotion and feeling of those peoples successes to improve would be extremely nice, compared with people who accept it. Next, by trying to improve, they can find some knowledge they did not know before. For instance, people who lost all his money will know the difficulty of making money, and significance of money, if they try to improve. At last, those successful people can get a sense of achievement, which might motivate them in the future. In conclusion, although people are beneficial to accept the bad situation sometimes, it is better to try to get out of the bad condition.
People
have
different
attitudes toward a
bad
situation
. While it has
some
benefits to
accept
such a
bad
condition, I believe trying to
improve
the
situation
is better.

There are various reasons why
some
people
choose to
accept
the
situation
, which they not prefer.
First
,
some
situation
cannot be
changed
.
For example
, I remember when my grandmother passed away, I could not recover from the
negative
emotion, the
only
way to
fix
it is to
accept
the fact. Second,
people
who refuse to
accept
, may need to face numbers of
risks
. Third, the damages they
get
physically
and mentally will be much bigger than the previous, if they try to shift the
situation
but
failed.

Although it is
dangerous
to
improve
the status, the merits outweighs the drawbacks.
Initially
, the emotion and feeling of those
peoples
successes to
improve
would be
extremely
nice, compared with
people
who
accept
it.
Next
, by trying to
improve
, they can find
some
knowledge they did not know
before
.
For instance
,
people
who lost all his money will know the difficulty of making money, and significance of money, if they try to
improve
. At last, those successful
people
can
get
a sense of achievement, which might motivate them in the future.

In conclusion
, although
people
are beneficial to
accept
the
bad
situation
sometimes
, it is better to try to
get
out of the
bad
condition.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 100 v. 55

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