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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.45

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 45
People faces different trials and challenges in their lives, including employment and financial problems. But instead of doing something to overcome those difficulties, some tend to just let the situation pass in their life and accept what comes in the way. This essay will discuss these arguments, but I strongly believe that thinking and working hard to make the situation better are the best things to do. It is understandable that many people around the world are in dire situation, living in war zone areas, places with epidemic outbreak and countries experiencing a drastic economic downturn. These conditions do not only affect their employment and finances, but also their overall health and well-being caused by severe trauma and stress. It may seem cruel to suggest that they should find ways to improve their lives when their condition appears extremely helpless. As a result, they just accept what might happen to them in every day that comes ahead. On the other hand, it is notable that even in the most impossible situation, there are still many stories to tell about amazing people who strived to make their lives better in spite of their hopeless condition. In addition to that, even the countries devastated by wars and territorial conflicts, like Germany, Japan and South Korea, yet they are all considered currently as economic powerhouses. By not accepting their situation, they were able to progress and survive. Moreover, the efficacy of their people individually who work hard reflected the overall success of their countries. In my opinion, when a person work hard and strive, even during the most difficult situation, a small step will still make a difference. Being optimistic and with a positive attitude, this will eventually make progress towards improving their lives and achieving the goal.
People
faces
different
trials and challenges in their
lives
, including employment and financial problems.
But
instead
of doing something to overcome those difficulties,
some
tend to
just
let
the
situation
pass in their life and accept what
comes
in the way. This essay will discuss these arguments,
but
I
strongly
believe that thinking and working
hard
to
make
the
situation
better are the best things to do.

It is understandable that
many
people
around the world are in dire
situation
, living in war zone areas, places with epidemic outbreak and countries experiencing a drastic economic downturn. These conditions do not
only
affect their employment and finances,
but
also
their
overall
health and well-
being caused
by severe trauma and
stress
. It may seem cruel to suggest that they should find ways to
improve
their
lives
when their condition appears
extremely
helpless.
As a result
, they
just
accept what might happen to them
in every day
that
comes
ahead.

On the other hand
, it is notable that even in the most impossible
situation
, there are
still
many
stories to
tell
about amazing
people
who strived to
make
their
lives
better
in spite of
their hopeless condition.
In addition
to that, even the countries devastated by wars and territorial conflicts, like Germany, Japan and South Korea,
yet
they are all considered
currently
as economic powerhouses. By not accepting their
situation
, they were able to progress and survive.
Moreover
, the efficacy of their
people
individually
who work
hard
reflected the
overall
success of their countries.

In my opinion, when a person work
hard
and strive, even during the most difficult
situation
, a
small
step will
still
make
a difference. Being optimistic and with a
positive
attitude, this will
eventually
make
progress towards improving their
lives
and achieving the goal.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 45

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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