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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.43

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 43
An individual’s action in the present will determine his fate in the future. Some people believe that one should accept whatever unfavourable situations like poor working conditions or lack of funds, which may come along his/her way. Whereas, there is also a belief system which tries to break the earlier notion in pursuit of the betterment of the living conditions. Through the medium of this essay, I will discuss both the viewpoints and provide my personal opinion in the end. There are people, who continue to cling on to the unpleasant situations in their lives with just a ray of hope that perhaps one fine day their situation will change. For example, I have a friend named Ashok, who is a very bright and intelligent person, but he is utterly dissatisfied with his working conditions at the bank as his boss is very abusive. However, he is not willing to leave his position or seek a transfer as he believes that some day his problems will be solved automatically. In another case, there are people in this world, who are not willing to sacrifice their definition of an ideal life and they strive to change things around them to make lives better for themselves. For example, another friend of mine named Vilas, who was in a similar situation under the grip of a very rude and abusive boss, but he resigned and searched better job for himself as he couldn’t have worked there just by staying silent and obeying to his cruel superior. Although none of the above mentioned methods are completely correct, In my opinion, people should take calculated steps and analyze the entire situation before following any of the above mentioned steps in order to make their respective lives more meaningful
An individual’s action in the present will determine his fate in the future.
Some
people
believe that one should accept whatever
unfavourable
situations
like poor working conditions or lack of funds, which may
come
along his/her way.
Whereas
, there is
also
a belief system which tries to break the earlier notion in pursuit of the betterment of the living conditions. Through the medium of this essay, I will discuss both the viewpoints and provide my personal opinion in the
end
.

There are
people
,
who
continue to cling on to the unpleasant
situations
in their
lives
with
just
a ray of hope that perhaps one fine day their
situation
will
change
.
For example
, I have a friend named Ashok,
who
is a
very
bright and intelligent person,
but
he is
utterly
dissatisfied with his working conditions at the bank as his boss is
very
abusive.
However
, he is not willing to
leave
his position or seek a transfer as he believes that
some
day his problems will
be solved
automatically
.

In another case, there are
people
in this world,
who
are not willing to sacrifice their definition of an ideal
life and
they strive to
change
things around them to
make
lives
better for themselves.
For example
, another friend of mine named
Vilas
,
who
was in a similar
situation
under the grip of a
very
rude and abusive boss,
but
he resigned and searched better job for himself as he couldn’t have worked there
just
by staying silent and obeying to his cruel superior.

Although none of the above mentioned methods are completely correct, In my opinion,
people
should take calculated steps and analyze the entire
situation
before
following any of the above mentioned steps in order to
make
their respective
lives
more meaningful
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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