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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.41

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 41
Recently, the debate on accepting or improving bad situation has become heated. As far as I am concerned, both points of views are reasonable, however, I'm more supporting on the improving one. It's understandable for people to think accepting a bad situation might be the best. They might consider leading to come dire effects if we want to change the situation. As when we are not satisfied with the surrounding, it might be easy for us to start complaining. For instance, we might blame on the low salary we have got or how dull our jobs are. However, while many of us are not able to improve the situation in a short time, trying to enhance the situation might lead to unsatisfication, while accepting the situation will not. Therefore, they might consider it as the best way. However, for those we assert improving is better, they might consider it as the only chance for us to get rid of the undesirable situation, as we already have nothing to lose under that circumstance. For example, we can work hard for a higher job place with higher salary when we are out of money. As a result, this shows that trying can help us to reach a better life and help us to boost our situation. In my opinion, I think working hard for a more favourable future is better in terms of long term, while patience is inevitable. As this can help us to reach a better life steps by steps. To summarise, accepting might not lead to complaint while it may not allow us to improve at the same time. Nevertheless, trying and improving the unfavourable situation might help us to achieve a promising future. Therefore, we should try working for enhancing our life instead of accepting what we have. After the analyse, I believe that the trend of trying will be prevailed.
Recently, the debate on
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bad
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situation
has become heated. As far as I
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one.

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people
to
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think
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accepting
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bad
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situation
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might
be the best. They
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might
consider leading to
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come
dire effects if we want to
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change
the
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situation
. As when we are not satisfied with the surrounding, it
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might
be easy for us to
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start
complaining.
For instance
, we
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might
blame on the low salary we have
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got
or how dull our jobs are.
However
, while
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many
of us are not able to
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improve
the
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situation
in a short time,
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trying
to enhance the
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situation
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might
lead to
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unsatisfication
, while
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accepting
the
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will not.
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, they
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might
consider it as the best way.

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, for those we assert
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improving
is
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better
, they
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might
consider it as the
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only
chance for us to
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rid of the undesirable
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situation
, as we already have nothing to lose under that circumstance.
For example
, we can work
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hard
for a higher job place with higher salary when we are out of money.
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, this
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shows
that
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trying
can
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help
us to reach a
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better
life and
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help
us to boost our situation.

In my opinion, I
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think
working
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hard
for a more
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future is
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in terms of long term, while patience is inevitable.
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As
this can
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us to reach a
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better
life steps by steps.

To
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summarise
,
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accepting
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might
not lead to complaint while it may not
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allow
us to
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improve
at the same time.
Nevertheless
,
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and
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improving
the
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unfavourable
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situation
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might
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help
us to achieve a promising future.
Therefore
, we should try working for enhancing our life
instead
of
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accepting
what we have. After the
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analyse
, I believe that the trend of
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will
be prevailed
.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 41

Essay
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313 words
6.5
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