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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.40

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. 40
Facing the dilemma of choosing some options to improve the situation or accepting what happens is a common case in peoples' life leading to different decision with its results. Following, both perspectives and why I believe in finding solution in every situation are discussed. There are many reasons to accept the bad circumstances, one of which could be the root causes of the situation making them to be inevitable. In other words, we might encounter with some incidents which are out of our control and tolerating the condition is the only way to deal with. For example, in the case of a crisis, finding a place to survive is the only thing to be done by someone as there is no recognized procedures to control it. Notwithstanding the above justifications, there are stronger reasons in endeavouring to change the bad condition for a good one, the best of which might be the nature of humanity in thinking and creativity. In fact the most important traits of humanity are its creativity and intelligence causing superiority over other creatures. We, as humans, can think about different aspects of a problem to find a solution in order to overcome it. As an instance, distance between cities and countries is a physical fact that cannot be changed. So, trains, airplanes, cars and even rockets have been invented to travel as fast as possible between these locations. By the same token, nobody can think about sending a letter through the traditional mailing system in the case of email. Henceforth, naturally unavoidable as some situations might be, there are strong reasons for making efforts to change the situation in the favour of having state improvement which I believe in.
Facing the dilemma of choosing
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options to
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improve
the
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situation
or accepting what happens is a common case in peoples' life leading to
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different
decision with its results. Following, both perspectives and why I believe in finding solution in every
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situation
are discussed
.

There are
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many
reasons to accept the
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bad
circumstances, one of which could be the root causes of the
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situation
making them to be inevitable.
In other words
, we might encounter with
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some
incidents which are out of our control and tolerating the condition is the
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only
way to deal with.
For example
, in the case of a crisis, finding a place to survive is the
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only
thing to
be done
by someone as there is no recognized procedures to control it.

Notwithstanding the above justifications, there are stronger reasons in
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endeavouring
to
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change
the
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bad
condition for a
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good
one, the best of which might be the nature of humanity in thinking and creativity. In fact the most
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important
traits of humanity are its creativity and intelligence causing superiority over other creatures. We, as humans, can
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think
about
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different
aspects of a problem to find a solution in order to overcome it. As an instance, distance between cities and countries is a physical fact that cannot be
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changed
.
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So
, trains, airplanes, cars and even rockets have
been invented
to travel as
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fast
as possible between these locations. By the same token, nobody can
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think
about sending a letter through the traditional mailing system in the case of email.

Henceforth,
naturally
unavoidable as
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some
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situations
might be, there are strong reasons for making efforts to
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change
the
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situation
in the
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favour
of having state improvement which I believe in.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. 40

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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