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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.38

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 38
The positive attitude of life, at the present area, has inevitably been an essential part of people's daily activities. Enormous people believe that it is better for them to alter and improve a variety of bad situations. However, somebody considers that people should accept this situation such as unsatisfactory occupation or poor. This essay will argue that we should be positive and passionate to change bad situations. Admittedly, it seems that it is reasonable for people to accept different bad situations. If people are accustomed to bad situations, they would feel reassured and think that is nothing. To exemplify, homeless people, who beg food and money on the street, accept all bad situations, and they do not care about anything, which may be good for people's mental health. Nevertheless, this notion is based on the measuring, ignoring the fact that positive attitude and passionate to change life is the only way to help you improving the quality of your life. There are two main reasons that can help you interpret the importance of the stance of changing life. Firstly, the most significant thing is about your attitude. Just like homeless people, who accept all bad situations, but never changing, are living in the very unfriendly environment. They do have warm family and enough food to survive, besides, they would be timid and rigid to consider that nothing is important and refuse to find a job to earn money. In this way, the only pathway that we could change it is to cheer up and encourage yourself to surmount any obstacles, otherwise, there is nothing left. Secondly, society needs people to fight for themselves. The developed society is consisted with a group of meticulous working people. If everyone in this society just only accepts bad situations and do not change it, the social system would be broken and provoke a lot of problems prompt, which may put life in danger. In conclusion, it is necessary for people to be keen on fighting and change their bad situations, if they do not do it, it could provoke a far-fetched situation that makes people live in an unsatisfied environment, and sensitive life would not exist any more.
The
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positive
attitude of
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life
, at the present area, has
inevitably
been an essential part of
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people
's daily activities. Enormous
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people
believe that it is better for them to alter and
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improve
a variety of
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bad
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situations
.
However
, somebody considers that
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people
should
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accept
this
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situation
such as unsatisfactory occupation or poor. This essay will argue that we should be
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positive
and passionate to
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change
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bad
situations.

Admittedly
, it seems that it is reasonable for
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people
to
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accept
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different
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bad
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situations
. If
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people
are accustomed
to
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bad
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situations
, they would feel reassured and
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think
that is
nothing. To exemplify, homeless
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people
, who beg food and money on the street,
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accept
all
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bad
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situations
, and they do not care about anything, which may be
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good
for
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people
's mental health.
Nevertheless
, this notion
is based
on the measuring, ignoring the fact that
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positive
attitude and passionate to
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change
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life
is the
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only
way to
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help
you
The verb 'only' is used with an infinitive: "to improve" or "improve".
improving
the quality of your life.

There are two main reasons that can
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help
you interpret the importance of the stance of changing
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life
.
Firstly
, the most significant thing is about your attitude.
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Just
like homeless
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people
, who
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accept
all
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bad
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situations
,
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but
never changing, are living in the
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very
unfriendly
environment. They do have warm family and
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enough
food to survive,
besides
, they would be timid and rigid to consider that nothing is
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important
and refuse to find a job to earn money. In this way, the
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only
pathway that we could
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change
it is to cheer up and encourage yourself to surmount any obstacles,
otherwise
, there is nothing
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left
.
Secondly
, society needs
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people
to fight for themselves. The developed society
is consisted
with a group of meticulous working
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people
. If everyone in this society
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just
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only
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accepts
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bad
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situations
and do not
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change
it, the social system would
be broken
and provoke
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a lot of
problems prompt, which may put
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life
in
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danger
.

In conclusion
, it is necessary for
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people
to be keen on fighting and
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change
their
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bad
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situations
, if they do not do it, it could provoke a far-fetched
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situation
that
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makes
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people
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live
in an unsatisfied environment, and sensitive
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life
would not exist
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 38

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.5
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