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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is best to try and improve such situations. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.36

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is best to try and improve such situations. v. 36
Many people find themselves in life situations where they have to accept it whether it’s harsh or bright. Some argue it is best to improve such circumstances by working hard. In my view every negative situation experienced in person’s life should include an opportunity to better off such terrible conditions. First and foremost, the main reason for this thought is prejudiced belief which is deeply affected by religious belief system. In other words, there is concept in religions that everything happens for a greater reason, and altering it would be against fate. For example, a research carried out by an author Thomas Dallas in Washington Post found that about 70% of people who accepted nasty treatment either from their fellow colleagues or students were religious believers that preached higher being called fate. On the other hand, there are plethora arguments to claim that accepting of current or bad situations would help people to avoid negative emotions. For example, when a person tries to find another job, there is no guarantee that a new job can offer them satisfaction. Moreover, in a serious scenario, such as wars or severe economic downturns, it could be hazardous and virtually impossible for an individual to change the situation. In conclusion, it is dangerous to make changes in quite few situations, but however in the vast majority of cases striving to improve bad situations can bring huge success, but also helps people to identify their potential and live their life in a more meaningful way. Therefore, I believe it is a rational approach to change unhappy situations by continued effort.
Many
people
find themselves in life
situations
where they
have to
accept it whether it’s harsh or bright.
Some
argue it is best to
improve
such circumstances by working
hard
. In my view every
negative
situation
experienced in person’s life should include an opportunity to better off such terrible conditions.

First
and foremost, the main reason for this
thought
is prejudiced
belief which is
deeply
affected
by religious belief system.
In other words
, there is concept in religions that everything happens for a greater reason, and altering it would be against fate.
For example
,
a research
carried out by an author Thomas Dallas in Washington Post found that about 70% of
people
who
accepted
nasty treatment either from their
fellow colleagues
or students were religious believers that preached higher
being called
fate.

On the other hand
, there are plethora arguments to claim that accepting of
current
or
bad
situations
would
help
people
to avoid
negative
emotions.
For example
, when a person tries to find another job, there is no guarantee that a new job can offer them satisfaction.
Moreover
, in a serious scenario, such as wars or severe economic downturns, it could be hazardous and
virtually
impossible for an individual to
change
the situation.

In conclusion
, it is
dangerous
to
make
changes
in quite few
situations
,
but
however
in the vast majority of cases striving to
improve
bad
situations
can bring huge success,
but
also
helps
people
to identify their potential and
live
their life in a more meaningful way.
Therefore
, I believe it is a rational approach to
change
unhappy
situations
by continued effort.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is best to try and improve such situations. v. 36

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