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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to improve such situations Discuss both views and give your opinion v.35

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to improve such situations 35
The pressure due to today’s money-driven world causes negative impact for many, therefore they face inconvenient conditions. Some of the belief that acceptance is not an option but opponents to this view deem to struggle to correct the situation and this what I believe. Therefore, this essay will illustrate through the following lines the both views and the reasons behind my stance. Nowadays the global economic recession has massive influences on people financial decisions or career as well. In other words, this phenomenon caused a shortage of jobs, therefore, any employee has to stick with what he has now at least to survive even if his duty unsatisfied. According to an article in Economy today magazine published in last March that more than 54% of employees are not convinced with their jobs but they accepted due to their daily basis demands. Hence, if the governments will keep neglecting this the percentage of proponents of this trend day by day is getting up. However, the opponents of the earlier perspective believe of change and decline the acceptance of the bad situation. The conditions sometimes need additional efforts to be improved to the better whatever it cost. As a personal experience, I faced last year which regarding to acceptance to work extra hours without payment or will be terminated, subsequently, I choose to quit, but within a few days I got an offer to work in a multinational company. Thus, as per the last example, it is clear that struggling for rights in either job or money is demand for many individuals and it is their faith as well. In conclusion, I reiterate that these obstacles of working life and the dire consequences will be faced because of some decision, it could be easily changed or enhanced by a little bit of endeavour.
The pressure due to
today
’s money-driven world causes
negative
impact for
many
,
therefore
they face inconvenient conditions.
Some of the
belief that acceptance is not an option
but
opponents to this view deem to struggle to correct the situation and this what I believe.
Therefore
, this essay will illustrate through the following lines the both views and the reasons behind my stance.

Nowadays the global economic recession has massive influences on
people
financial decisions or career
as well
.
In other words
, this phenomenon caused a shortage of jobs,
therefore
, any employee
has to
stick with what he has
now
at least to survive even if his duty unsatisfied. According to an article in Economy
today
magazine published in last March that more than 54% of employees are not convinced with their jobs
but
they
accepted
due to their daily basis demands.
Hence
, if the
governments
will
keep
neglecting this the percentage of proponents of this trend day by day is getting up.

However
, the opponents of the earlier perspective believe of
change
and decline the acceptance of the
bad
situation. The conditions
sometimes
need additional efforts to be
improved
to the better whatever it cost. As a personal experience, I faced last year which
regarding to
acceptance to work extra hours without payment or will
be terminated
,
subsequently
, I choose to quit,
but
within a few days I
got
an offer to work in a multinational
company
.
Thus
, as per the last example, it is
clear
that struggling for rights in either job or money is demand for
many
individuals and it is their faith
as well
.

In conclusion
, I reiterate that these obstacles of working life and the dire consequences will
be faced
because
of
some
decision, it could be
easily
changed
or enhanced by a
little bit
of
endeavour
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to improve such situations 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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