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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words. v.34

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 34
There is a conflicting views about people's situations in life. While some people think that accepting a negative conditions is the best, such as lack of job satisfaction and financial incapicity, others believe that striving hard to improve is a better option. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguement and further iterate my view. On the one hand, it is often considered by some that it best to accept ones bad situations. It simply means that they have given up in life despite the opportunities which they could take advantage of in life. Even though they did not get there dream jobs and are unable to take care of there needs, they are comfortable with such hardship. In a workplace, for example, if they are cleaners and collecting low wages, they would neither improve their skills not educational backgrounds rather, they would be relaxed being in that position believing that they have accepted their fate. Consequently, resulting to an unsatisfactory career work, depression as well as poverty. Clearly, they have accepted this adverse situations, However, there are people who believe in a saying that ' Provided there is life, there is hope'. In other words, they explore every opportunity that they have even if it is stressful. To illustrate, people study or learn new skills while working in order to be promoted in their workplace or get a grow their career. As a result, they could get a better job offer with higher salaries, thereby, improvig their financial strength as well as satisfactory career. Obviously, it is better not to relent in life. In conclusion, I believe that remaining in a static situation without doing anything could lead to an adverse condition, it is best to keep pushing, improving one's skills and educational level in order to improve financially although it would be tiring if an immediate result is not seen. Therefore, people should never give up and remain in one condition.
There is a conflicting
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views
about
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people
's situations in
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life
. While
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some
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people
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think
that accepting a
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negative
conditions is the best, such as lack of job satisfaction and financial
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incapicity
, others believe that striving
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hard
to
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improve
is a better option. This essay will discuss both sides of the
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arguement
and
further
iterate my view.

On the one hand, it is
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often
considered by
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some
that
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it
best to accept ones
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bad
situations. It
simply
means that they have
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given
up in
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life
despite the opportunities which they could take advantage of in
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life
.
Even though
they did not
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get
there dream jobs and are unable to take care of
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there
needs, they are comfortable with such hardship. In a workplace,
for example
, if they are cleaners and collecting low wages, they would neither
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improve
their
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skills
not educational backgrounds
rather
, they would
be relaxed
being in that position believing that they have
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accepted
their fate.
Consequently
, resulting to an unsatisfactory career work, depression
as well
as poverty.
Clearly
, they have
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accepted
this adverse situations,

However
, there are
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people
who believe in a saying that
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'
Provided there is
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life
, there is hope'.
In other words
, they explore every opportunity that they have even if it is stressful. To illustrate,
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people
study or learn new
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skills
while working in order to
be promoted
in their workplace or
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get
a
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grow
their career.
As a result
, they could
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get
a better job offer with higher salaries, thereby,
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improvig
their financial strength
as well
as satisfactory career.
Obviously
, it is better not to relent in life.

In conclusion
, I believe that remaining in a static situation without doing anything could lead to an adverse condition, it is best to
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keep
pushing, improving one's
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skills
and educational level in order to
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improve
financially
although it would be tiring if an immediate result is not
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seen
.
Therefore
,
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people
should never give up and remain in one condition.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 34

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
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