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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.32

It is often argued that a number of people specualte, it is the easiest to adopt negative state, like an insufficient work or a minimum wage while others believe that it is more suitable to attempt and envolve such conditions. To my point of view, people should always work hard and to do their best, not to mention comply negative states. On the one hand, occasionally people need to accept some situations even if they are unsatisfied or dull. Gradually they convince themselves perhaps, it is the best way to adopt this kind of condition. To take an example a number of employees who are not pleased with their work, try to keep on working because they believe that they can not get more apprepriate job, and to feel under pressure are not their cup of tea. In global world, earning one’s living may substitute all conditions, therefore people need to accept some undesirable states. On the other hand, trying hard and choosing to improve is always the first choice for some people. People believe, life is short, we need to enjoy every second of our lives even if there are some problems. We should attempt continually for the best and not to accept stressful job condition and shortage of money. Preventing such kind of situations may increase life conditions and value people’s time and their self-being. Envolving such kind of situations is more relevant than accepting to work under pressure and a minimum wage. To conclude, it is claim by some people that accepting a negative conditions as a shortage of money and unpleased work is the best, while others consider to improve and attempt such kind of negative states. To my mind, people should try hard and admit this kind of conditions in their lives.
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, it is the easiest to adopt
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state, like an insufficient
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work
or a minimum wage while others believe that it is more suitable to attempt and
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envolve
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and to do their
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, not to mention comply
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negative
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occasionally
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people
need to accept
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situations even if they
are unsatisfied
or dull.
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they convince themselves perhaps, it is the
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best
way to adopt this
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kind
of
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. To take an example a number of employees who are not
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pleased
with their
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, try to
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they believe that they can not
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more
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apprepriate
job, and to feel under pressure are not their cup of tea. In global world, earning one’s living may substitute all conditions,
therefore
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need to accept
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some
undesirable states.

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, trying
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choice for
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believe, life is short, we need to enjoy every second of our
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lives
even if there are
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problems. We should attempt
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for the
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and not to accept stressful job
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condition
and shortage of money. Preventing such
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kind
of situations may increase life conditions and value
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people’s
time and their self-being.
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such
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of situations is more relevant than accepting to
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under pressure and a minimum wage.

To conclude
, it is claim by
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some
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people
that accepting a
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negative
conditions as a shortage of money and unpleased
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work
is the
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best
, while others consider to
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improve
and attempt such
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kind
of
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negative
states. To my mind,
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people
should try
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hard
and admit this
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kind
of conditions in their
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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