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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations v.25

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations v. 25
With the dawn of the 21st century, the living expenses and lifestyle have increased tremendously where more people are living the luxurious lifestyle while some struggle to pay for daily expenses. Everyone has different problems such as unsatisfactory job, shortage of money and others. People are unsatisfied in their jobs because they expect more such as higher salary while wanting to work comfortably, following the pattern of 9 am-5 pm working hours. As living expenses have risen, some people that live in poverty do not have sufficient money to get through the day. Is it better for people to accept these bad situations or should they work harder to improve their situation? Let's find out! Personally, I think it is better for people to try and improve their situation because I strongly believe that you get what you work hard for. If people stop complaining about everything and try to think of different solutions to solve their situation or problem, they will less likely to meet a difficult situation. Besides that, if they face the problem of having an unsatisfactory job, they could try to apply for a different job position in another company. Instead of complaining and not try their best in their workplace which could lead to a reduction in their salaries, they will not face the situation of lack of money. On the other hand, accepting a bad situation might not be as bad as it seems to be. Some people are lazy and they would rather just accept the situation and move on from there. In some ways, they are able to save time and their energy as they could just maintain in the same position rather than spending time to apply for a different job or find alternative ways to get more money. In conclusion, I think people should try to improve their situations instead of sitting back and relax. The outcome is that people that will improve will be able to have a better lifestyle and will not face any other different problems.
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tremendously
where more
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people
are living the luxurious lifestyle while
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some
struggle to pay for daily expenses. Everyone has
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different
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problems
such as unsatisfactory
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job
, shortage of money
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and others
.
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People
are unsatisfied
in their
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jobs
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because
they
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expect
more such as higher salary while wanting to work
comfortably
, following the pattern of 9 am-5 pm working hours. As living expenses have risen,
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some
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people
that
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live
in poverty do not have sufficient money to
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get
through the day. Is it better for
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people
to accept these
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bad
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situations
or should they work harder to
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improve
their
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situation
?
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Let
's find out!

Personally
, I
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think
it is better for
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people
to
"Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "try to" is recommended for writing.
try and
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improve
their
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situation
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because
I
strongly
believe that you
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get
what you work
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hard
for. If
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people
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stop
complaining about everything and try to
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think
of
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different
solutions to solve their
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situation
or
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problem
, they will less likely to
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meet
a difficult
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situation
.
Besides
that, if they face the
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problem
of having an unsatisfactory
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job
, they could try to apply for a
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different
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job
position in another
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company
.
Instead
of complaining and not try their best in their workplace which could lead to a reduction in their salaries, they will not face the
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situation
of lack of money.

On the other hand
, accepting a
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bad
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situation
might not be as
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bad
as it seems to be.
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Some
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people
are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
lazy and
they would
rather
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just
accept the
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situation
and
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move
on from there. In
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some
ways, they are able to save time and their energy as they could
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just
maintain in the same position
rather
than spending time to apply for a
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different
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job
or find alternative ways to
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get
more money.

In conclusion
, I
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think
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people
should try to
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improve
their
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situations
instead
of sitting back and relax. The outcome is that
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people
that will
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improve
will be able to have a better lifestyle and will not face any other
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different
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problems
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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