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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.22

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 22
It is irrefutable to say that we can'tt stop the situation whethere it is good or bad, but we musk try to recover the situation to try our best. Many people think that we should accept a worst situation such as poorness, unsatisfied jobs and a shortage of money. While other people arguing that it is important to improve situation as much as we can. I personally believe with the laterer view that we must at least try to improve situation rather accept it. To begin with, Ther are numerous people who give up very easily even in small bad situation. They can't handle situations properly and they accept it that there are no changes have been occurred in there's situation and lastly they accept situation and lives in bad situation. There are multiple examples of these situations such as scarcity of money due to poverty, unsatisfied with their job, and so on. Many people are lives in under poverty line and they can't even do for their bad situation. Sometimes they face a plethora of problems such as they can't completig their study, they can't eat delicious food like us, and many more. Another noticable bad situation is that some people are not satisfied with their job because there are number of pepole in our society who are doing job for feeding their family and fulfill familys' demand. They can't do enjoy their job and at the end they suffer from many typr of depression and anxiety. However, Other people believe that we can't put situation as it is. We must fight for it and put out ourselves from the bad situation. For example, india is a diverse country and there many people who live in bad situation before their golden days. Our indian cricketer Ms. Dhoni who was suffered multiple problems when he was a child and also before he became a successfull cricketer. He live in under poverty line but he decide to get rid out of this situation and he started hard work. He liked to became a cricketer but he didn't like the wicket keeping in cricket. But. Coach said to Dhoni is that there was only one place left and that was wicket keeping so Dhoni pursued this particular field and look better days are coming for him and Today he is a successfull and brilliant cricketer. Moreover, People who don't like to do their job and also unsatisfied with their job, they must try to get out from this situation rather then putting themselves under pressure. Many People in India and also in other countries they are doing multiple jobs in a day. In this situation, there are a plethora of problem solving reasons such as to spen quality time with theur family, spend time with their near ones and dear ones. Many people who are doing freelancing to get out from their job and also we have to hustle hard to get out from this kind of situation. Many people are leave their jobs and starting their own business to complete their dreams and to live a luxurious life. In the all conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that tough time comes to everyone but we have to hustle hard to get out from the bad situation. It is too much important to take stands for our dreams and to put a happy smile in our family members and dear ones.
It is irrefutable to say that we can'
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stop
the
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situation
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whethere
it is
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good
or
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bad
,
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but
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we musk
try to recover the
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situation
to try our best.
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Many
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people
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think
that we should
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accept
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a
worst
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situation
such as poorness, unsatisfied
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jobs
and a shortage of money.
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While
other
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people
arguing that it is
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important
to
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improve
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situation
as much as we can. I
personally
believe with the
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laterer
view that we
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must
at least try to
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improve
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situation
rather
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accept
it.

To
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begin
with,
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Ther are
numerous
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people
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who
give up
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very
easily
even in
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small
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bad
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situation
. They
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can't
handle
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situations
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properly and
they
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accept
it that there are no
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changes
have
been occurred
in there's
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situation
and
lastly
they
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accept
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situation
and
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lives
in
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bad
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situation
. There are multiple examples of these
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situations
such as scarcity of money due to poverty, unsatisfied with their
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job
, and
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so
on.
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Many
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people
are
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lives
in under poverty
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line and
they
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can't
even do for their
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bad
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situation
.
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Sometimes
they face a plethora of problems such as they
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can't
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completig
their study, they
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can't
eat delicious food like us, and
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many
more. Another
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noticable
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bad
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situation
is that
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some
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people
are not satisfied with their
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job
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because
there are number of
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pepole
in our society
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who
are doing
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job
for feeding their family and fulfill
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familys
' demand. They
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can't
do enjoy their
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job
and at the
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end
they suffer from
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many
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typr
of depression and anxiety.

However
, Other
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people
believe that we
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can't
put
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situation
as it is. We
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must
fight for it and put out ourselves from the
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bad
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situation
.
For example
,
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india
is a diverse country and there
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many
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people
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who
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live
in
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bad
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situation
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before
their golden days. Our
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indian
cricketer Ms.
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Dhoni
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who
was suffered
multiple problems when he was a child and
also
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before
he became a
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successfull
cricketer. He
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live
in under poverty line
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but
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "decides", "decided".
decide
to
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get
rid out of this
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situation and
he
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started
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hard
work. He liked
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to became
a cricketer
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but
he didn't like the
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wicket keeping
in cricket.
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But
. Coach said to
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Dhoni
is that there was
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only
one place
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left
and that was
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wicket keeping
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so
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Dhoni
pursued this particular field and look better days are coming for him and
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Today
he is a
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successfull
and brilliant cricketer.

Moreover
,
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People
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who
don't like to do their
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job
and
also
unsatisfied with their
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job
, they
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must
try to
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get
out from this
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situation
rather
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then
putting themselves under pressure.
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Many
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People
in India and
also
in other countries they are doing multiple
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jobs
in a day. In this
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situation
, there are a plethora of problem solving reasons such as to
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spen
quality time with
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theur
family, spend time with their near
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ones
and dear
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ones
.
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Many
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people
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who
are
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doing freelancing
to
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get
out from their
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job
and
also
we
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have to
hustle
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hard
to
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get
out from this kind of
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situation
.
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Many
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people
are
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leave
their
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jobs
and starting their
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own
business to complete their dreams and to
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live
a luxurious life.

In the all conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that tough time
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comes
to everyone
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but
we
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have to
hustle
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hard
to
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get
out from the
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bad
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situation
. It is too much
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important
to take stands for our dreams and to put a happy smile in our family members and dear
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ones
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
74Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 22

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
572 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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