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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.20

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 20
The majority of people are proponents of the idea that the best way to face with tough situations are accepting it. On the other hand the opponents this statement believes that instead they can make afford to enhance and change that circumstance. In my opinion, I would rather modify this problematic situation with hardworking and observe my progress. The following essay will discuss both views thoroughly. Nowadays, if we are in an unsatisfied work we should acquire skills which are related to work for changing level up and get confidence for doing that. Maybe could not change the business so, you have to modify performance or workplace and instead attention to your interests for having a great work due to the fact that, this decision related to your motivation and pleasing to yourself. If you did not give good money as a salary, you have to increase your knowledge and make smarter for making more money. For example, as I mentioned before you can pay attention to your interest and get more experience then you can abdicate and start your own job. To my mind, never late for having a good job, but it needs courage. Besides, some people afraid to do a specific business for him/her self. In conclusion, changeable is more difficulty than stay in previously position, but with strong mode and try you can observe to achieve everything and I believe that if they want do it every extraordinary position and state are constructs. Hardworking and hope to the future causes of the success as a money, great work and enjoy for having many things.
The majority of
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people
are proponents of the
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idea
that the best way to face with tough situations are accepting it.
On the other hand
the opponents this statement believes that
instead
they can
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make
afford to enhance and
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change
that circumstance.

In my opinion, I would
rather
modify this problematic situation with hardworking and observe my progress. The following essay will discuss both views
thoroughly
.

Nowadays, if we are in an unsatisfied
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work
we should acquire
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skills
which
are related
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for changing level up and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
confidence for doing that. Maybe could not
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change
the business
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so
, you
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have to
modify performance or workplace and
instead
attention to your
The usual collocation for "interests" is "in" not "for". Did you mean "interests in"?
interests for
having a great
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work
due to the fact that, this decision related to your motivation and pleasing to yourself.

If you did not give
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good
money as a salary, you
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have to
increase your knowledge and
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make
smarter for making more money.
For example
, as I mentioned
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before
you can pay attention to your interest and
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get
more experience
Did you mean "than"?
then
you can abdicate and
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start
your
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own
job. To my mind, never late for having a
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good
job,
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but
it needs courage.

Besides
,
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some
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people
afraid to do a specific business for him/her self.

In conclusion
, changeable is more difficulty than stay in previously position,
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but
with strong mode and try you can observe to achieve everything and I believe that if they
Probably a preposition is missing after 'want'.
want do
it every extraordinary position and state are constructs. Hardworking and hope to the future causes of the success as a money, great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and enjoy for having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 20

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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