Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an un satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it its better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an un satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it its better to try and improve such situations. v. 1
Some people assume that while we fail in a bad situation, we tend to accept it but others have the opposite opinions. In my point of view, people should accept that situation and after that, they need to try their best to improve it. On the one hand, accepting the bad things could help people out of the pressure. For example, people, especially children, always feel bad when they get low grades in the school, which make them comparable with their friends and leads to some serious mental issues such as depression, anxiety. If someone falls into a bad circumstance, the first thing they need to do is accept it, and try to find the root cause of the problem, which could help them never meet it again. On the other hand, if you just accept it, you will not overcome that situation and will meet it someday in the future. In order to solve it, it is quite essential for you to try to improve or enhance the result. For instance, when you get a bad mark, you need to find out the reasons why you got there and make a suitable schedule to revise knowledge for further examination. If you do not take a step, you will get stuck in such situations forever, which leads you to lag behind others in the class. The more effort you put in, the more goals you will achieve in the future. To sum up, you do not worry about a bad circumstance that you meet. You can accept it as a part of your life and then, finding out the root cause of the problem and trying your best to improve it are important things that you might do.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
assume that while we fail in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
, we tend to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accept
it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
others have the opposite opinions. In my point of view,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accept
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
and after that, they need to try their best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
it.

On the one hand, accepting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
things could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
out of the pressure.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
especially
children, always feel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
low grades in the school, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them comparable with their friends and leads to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
serious mental issues such as depression, anxiety. If someone falls into a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
circumstance, the
first
thing they need to do is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accept
it, and try to find the root cause of the problem, which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
it again.

On the other hand
, if you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accept
it, you will not overcome that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
it someday in the future. In order to solve it, it is quite essential for you to try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
or enhance the result.
For instance
, when you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
mark, you need to find out the reasons why you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
there and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a suitable schedule to revise knowledge for
further
examination. If you do not take a step, you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
stuck in such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situations
forever, which leads you to lag behind others in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. The more effort you put in, the more goals you will achieve in the future.

To sum up, you do not worry about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bad
circumstance that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
. You can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accept
it as a part of your life and then, finding out the root cause of the problem and trying your best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
it are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
things that you might do.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an un satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it its better to try and improve such situations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts