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Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 1
The reaction in bad situation varies person to person. Some individuals make peace with it and remain calm while other strive hard to bring themselves out of the situation. This essay will discuss both aspects of people's reaction in a bad situation. Sometimes, people deliberately put themselves in a challenging situation and accept it gracefully. Through various researches, one of the reason for this comes out to be people like to stay in a difficult situation for some time in order to get positive outcomes in near future. A study has been conducted at the university of Manchester related to fresh graduates who accept less paid job to gain more experience and understanding of practical work which benefit them in their future. Thus initial acceptance of difficult situation leads to better opportunities in future makes people accept it. On the other hand, there exists people who cannot tolerate to remain in such situation for a long time and they struggle hard to mold it in their favor. Not everyone can afford to be in a negative situation based on their responsibilities. For instance if a person is not satisfied with the current position at their workplace but cannot afford to lose their job, they would make the most of their skills, abilities and perform well in all their dealings to get in the good books of their employer. Therefore, hard work and efforts can bring them out from this difficult situation. To conclude, I would say it totally depends on a person how he reacts in a situation based on their circumstances and responsibilities. Sometimes it is alright to remain in a bad situation in order to get the advantages later, but if the situation is getting out of hands then hard work and dedication is the key to cope up with it.
The reaction in
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bad
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situation
varies
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person
to
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person
.
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Some
individuals
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make
peace with it and remain calm while other strive
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hard
to bring themselves out of the
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situation
. This essay will discuss both aspects of
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people
's reaction in a
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bad
situation.

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Sometimes
,
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people
deliberately
put themselves in a challenging
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situation
and accept it
gracefully
. Through various researches, one of the reason for this
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comes
out to be
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people
like to stay in a difficult
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situation
for
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some
time in order to
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get
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positive
outcomes in near future. A study has
been conducted
at the
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university of Manchester
related to fresh graduates who accept less paid job to gain more experience and understanding of practical work which benefit them in their future.
Thus
initial acceptance of difficult
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situation
leads to better opportunities in future
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makes
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people
accept it.

On the other hand
, there exists
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people
who cannot
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tolerate to remain
in such
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situation
for a long
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time and
they struggle
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hard
to mold it in their favor. Not everyone can afford to be in a
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negative
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situation
based on their responsibilities.
For instance
if a
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person
is not satisfied with the
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current
position at their workplace
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but
cannot afford to lose their job, they would
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make
the most of their
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skills
, abilities and perform well in all their dealings to
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get
in the
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good
books of their employer.
Therefore
,
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hard
work and efforts can bring them out from this difficult situation.

To conclude
, I would say it
totally
depends on a
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person
how he reacts in a
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situation
based on their circumstances and responsibilities.
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Sometimes
it is alright to remain in a
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bad
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situation
in order to
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get
the advantages later,
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but
if the
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situation
is getting out of hands then
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hard
work and dedication is the key to cope up with it.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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