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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce this amount of rubbish produced? v.7

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce this amount of rubbish produced? v. 7
Excessive production of garbage is indeed an ever-increasing issue facing by the whole world these days. This trend is mainly due to over utilization of plastic bags and electronic waste. However, several measures could be implemented to tackle this problem. The most significant cause of growing waste is the usage of plastic bags. The majority of people often go shopping in malls, supermarkets and retail shops with empty-handed with a view that they will be provided with a plastic bag, even if they buy a single item, which gives rise to rubbish. Such plastic bags are never recycled thing on the earth. In order to tackle this menace, the government should ban plastic bags by imposing high taxes and introducing biodegradable bags in the market. As a result, people will be able to carry their own cotton bag from home and it leads to a reduction in growing waste. Electronic waste is another major reason which contributes to increasing rubbish. The advent of technologies has changed the way of people’s thinking than earlier. At present, usually, people want to try every new model of phones and laptops which are incorporated in the market. Consequently, their current electronic items are being redundant. Besides this, the price of the new product is not as high as its repairing cost, meaning that the augmenting number of people tend to buy a new one rather than repairing them. Thus, it is evident that excessive rubbish is brought by electronic waste. To solve this problem, the government should run campaigns to make people aware of the importance of e-waste recycling and how it is deleterious to our planet. To conclude, increasing waste often stems from the growing usage of plastic bags and buying advance electronic gadgets like phone and laptop. Only when the government enacts stringent laws on plastic bags and create awareness among people about recycling importance to the environment, will the issue be fully resolved.
Excessive production of garbage is
indeed
an ever-increasing issue facing by the whole world these days. This trend is
mainly
due to over utilization of
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plastic
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bags
and
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electronic
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waste
.
However
, several measures could
be implemented
to tackle this problem.

The most significant cause of growing
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waste
is the usage of
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plastic
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bags
. The majority of
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people
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often
go shopping in malls, supermarkets and retail shops with empty-handed with a view that they will
be provided
with a
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plastic
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bag
, even if they
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buy
a single item, which gives rise to rubbish. Such
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plastic
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bags
are never recycled thing on the earth. In order to tackle this menace, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should ban
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plastic
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bags
by imposing high taxes and introducing biodegradable
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bags
in the market.
As a result
,
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people
will be able to carry their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
cotton
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bag
from home and it leads to a reduction in growing waste.

Electronic
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waste
is another major reason which contributes to increasing rubbish. The advent of technologies has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the way of
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people’s
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thinking
than earlier. At present,
usually
,
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people
want to try every new model of phones and laptops which
are incorporated
in the market.
Consequently
, their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
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electronic
items are being redundant.
Besides
this, the price of the new product is not as high as
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its
repairing cost, meaning that the augmenting number of
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people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new one
rather
than repairing them.
Thus
, it is evident that excessive rubbish
is brought
by
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electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
. To solve this problem, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should run campaigns to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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people
aware of the importance of e-waste recycling and how it is deleterious to our planet.

To conclude
, increasing
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waste
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
stems from the growing usage of
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plastic
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bags
and buying advance
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electronic
gadgets like phone and laptop.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
when the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
enacts stringent laws on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
and create awareness among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
about recycling importance to the environment, will the issue be
fully
resolved.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce this amount of rubbish produced? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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