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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.36

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 36
In the midst of globalisation and industrialisation, the amount of waste being exhaled, detrimental to our planet earth, is appalling. Reasons are aplenty, as to why this is a frequent occurrence and the imperative role of government worldwide over in countering this, is a moot one. Let us discourse on the same below. There are many reasons behind the increase in the production of rubbish throughout the world. Firstly, the ever increase of population of the humankind has contributed to a mammoth share of the trash. The number of people has always been directly proportional to the volume of waste being produced from the time immemorial. Secondly, the industrial revolution, that shook the world a decade ago, is considered the sole culprit in the production of industrious waste onto earth’s surface. Again the number of industries and factories contributing to this menace is on a steep climb, since its inception. Thirdly, the population rise has led to more transport system around the world, owing to an increase in the waste produced from the vehicles and other means of transport. To cite an example from the part of the world I live, the discarded parts of cars, such as a blotted tire, is ubiquitous, compared to the past. Finally, the sheer negligence from us, with regards to the recycling of waste products has led to adding more chaos to the present scenario. No care, what so ever, was taken in the production of biodegradable products, so as to mitigate the amount of trash produced! The role of government in combating the issue is inevitable. They should be imposing restrictions on the above-discoursed factors, favouring waste segregation. Population check, of governments on their respective states, should be made mandatory. The industries and factories should be restricted and monitored for the effective recycling or biodegradation of their waste produced. The amenities used by mankind, such as transport should be made more efficient and effective in terms of discarded residual waste. Building eco-friendly homes should be encouraged.   More emphasis should be made on the recycling of all the industrial trash being produced o an emergency basis. The government should focus more on the fact that these are either biodegradable or can be recycled effectively. From the above discourse, someone's role as civilians of earth and that of government is quite interdependent and significant, when comes to reducing the amount of waste being produced.   Punitive measures from the government are the needs of the hour, to tackle this issue, so as to ensure rather envisage, a cleaner and habitable planet earth.
In the midst of
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globalisation
and
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industrialisation
, the amount of
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waste
being exhaled
, detrimental to our planet
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earth
, is appalling. Reasons are aplenty, as to why this is a frequent occurrence and the imperative role of
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government
worldwide over in countering this, is a moot one.
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Let
us discourse on the same below.

There are
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many
reasons behind the increase in the production of rubbish throughout the
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world
.
Firstly
, the ever increase of population of the humankind has contributed to a mammoth share of the trash. The number of
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people
has always been
directly
proportional to the volume of
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waste
being
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produced
from the time immemorial.
Secondly
, the industrial revolution, that shook the
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world
a decade ago,
is considered
the sole culprit in the production of industrious
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waste
onto
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earth’s
surface. Again the number of industries and factories contributing to this menace is on a steep climb, since its inception.

Thirdly
, the population rise has led to more transport system around the
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world
, owing to an increase in the
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waste
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produced
from the vehicles and other means of transport. To cite an example from the part of the
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world
I
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live
, the discarded parts of cars, such as a blotted tire, is ubiquitous, compared to the past.
Finally
, the sheer negligence from us,
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with regards to
the recycling of
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waste
products has led to adding more chaos to the present scenario. No care, what
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so
ever,
was taken
in the production of biodegradable products,
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so as to
mitigate the amount of trash produced!

The role of
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government
in combating the issue is inevitable. They should be imposing restrictions on the above-discoursed factors,
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favouring
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waste
segregation. Population
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check
, of
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governments
on their respective states, should
be made
mandatory. The industries and factories should
be restricted
and monitored for the effective recycling or biodegradation of their
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waste
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produced
. The amenities
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used
by mankind, such as transport should
be made
more efficient and effective in terms of discarded residual
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waste
. Building eco-friendly homes should
be encouraged
.
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More emphasis should
be made
on the recycling of all the industrial trash being
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produced
o an emergency basis. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should focus more on the fact that these are either biodegradable or can
be recycled
effectively
.

From the above discourse, someone's role as civilians of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
earth
and that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is quite interdependent and significant, when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to reducing the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
being
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produced
.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
Punitive measures from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
are the needs of the hour, to tackle this issue,
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
ensure
rather
envisage, a cleaner and habitable planet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
earth
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 36

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
428 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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