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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.27

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 27
There are many signs that the activities of mankind are leading to global warming. This essay will discuss the reasons why this problem is occurring, and make some suggestions about how this issue can be tackled. Perhaps the main cause of global warming is that populations are rising in almost every country, and this is causing trees to be constantly cut-down to provide shelter and also food. Trees are important because they absorb CO2 and rising levels of CO2 have been linked to higher temperature levels. Another factor that is causing CO2 to rise is the industrialisation of our societies. Today, we have more and more factories and they are causing high levels of pollution in our atmosphere. Industrialisation is also leading to the burning of fossil fuels to power the factories and this is also another source of carbon emissions. Therefore, economic activities are another cause of our planet warming. Urgent attention is required to deal with the problem of global warming. The main way to tackle this is for forests to be protected and new trees grown. This can be achieved by the government making laws to protect the remaining forests. Grass root programs could also be started to plant new trees. In addition, the government should create incentives for factories to adopt clean energy programs to reduce the pollution they are emitting. In conclusion, the earth’s temperature is rising because of deforestation and industrialisation. The solutions are to start preserving our remaining forests, plant new ones and to switch to cleaner energy sources.
There are
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signs that the activities of mankind are leading to global warming. This essay will discuss the reasons why this problem is occurring, and
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make
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some
suggestions about how this issue can
be tackled
.

Perhaps the main cause of global warming is that populations are rising in almost every country, and this is causing
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trees
to be
constantly
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cut
-down to provide shelter and
also
food.
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Trees
are
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important
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because
they absorb CO2 and rising levels of CO2 have
been linked
to higher temperature levels. Another factor
that is
causing CO2 to rise is the
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industrialisation
of our societies.
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Today
, we have more and more
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factories and
they are causing high levels of pollution in our atmosphere.
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Industrialisation
is
also
leading to the burning of fossil fuels to power the factories and this is
also
another source of carbon emissions.
Therefore
, economic activities are another cause of our planet warming.

Urgent attention
is required
to deal with the problem of global warming. The main way to tackle this is for forests to
be protected
and new
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trees
grown. This can
be achieved
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
making laws to protect the remaining forests. Grass root programs could
also
be
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started
to plant new
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trees
.
In addition
, the
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government
should create incentives for factories to adopt clean energy programs to
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reduce
the pollution they are emitting.

In conclusion
, the earth’s temperature is rising
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because
of deforestation and
Possible spelling mistake. 'industrialisation' is British English.
industrialisation
. The solutions are to
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start
preserving our remaining forests, plant new ones and to switch to cleaner energy sources.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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