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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.25

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 25
Rubbish production is increasing very fast lately. People produce a surprisingly high amount of trash which affect our lives and a life of our planet. There are a lot of reasons of that process. Firstly, these days a lot of goods are cheap and easy to get to most of the people. However, recent researches shown that the richer communities produce more trash than the poor ones. People earning more money, buy more, all types of goods. For example, they can afford renovations, so they simply throw away the old furniture and replace them with the new ones, even if the old ones are still able to be used. For instance, nowadays a bunch of products is packed with too many pieces of foil and paper. For example, a toothpaste in the tube is packed with the paper box and very often wrapped in the foil. Those packages are thrown away right after purchased which leads to make more and more rubbish. The government should take the right steps to reduce the number of producing trash, recycling is one of them. It should be required in every country to segregate the waste, which make the recycling easier and faster. Most of segregated waste can be processed and reused. Another thing that government should do, is to introduce the deposit for bottles, both plastic and glasses. That step has been already taken in some countries, such as Norway, Sweden or Germany and it works very well. People don't throw the bottles away, they collect them, give it back and get a deposit back. It save money and reduce the amount of trash. Moreover, some Asian countries use plastic bottles as a method of payment for metro tickets. The have machines, where they can insert a bottle instead of cash or card and buy a ticket. Thus, there is a lot of ways that government can help to reduce amount of trash. In conclusion, the number of producing rubbish is one of the biggest problems in our world. It affects especially our planet. However, some countries already pay attention to this problem, more is needed to stop producing trash.
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produce a
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high amount of
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trash
which affect our
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lives
and a life of our planet. There are
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a lot of
reasons of that process.

Firstly
, these days
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a lot of
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goods
are
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cheap
and easy to
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get
to most of the
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people
.
However
, recent researches shown that the richer communities produce more
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trash
than the poor
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ones
.
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People
earning more money,
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buy
more, all types of
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goods
.
For example
, they can afford renovations,
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so
they
simply
throw away the
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old
furniture and replace them with the new
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ones
, even if the
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old
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ones
are
still
able to be
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used
.
For instance
, nowadays a bunch of products
is packed
with too
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many
pieces of foil and paper.
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For
example, a toothpaste in the tube
is packed
with the paper box and
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very
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often
wrapped in the foil. Those packages
are thrown
away right after
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purchased
which leads to
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make
more and more rubbish.

The
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government
should take the right steps to
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reduce
the number of producing
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trash
, recycling is one of them. It should
be required
in every
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country
to segregate the waste, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the recycling easier and faster. Most of segregated waste can
be processed
and reused. Another thing that
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government
should do, is to introduce the deposit for
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bottles
, both plastic and glasses. That step has been already taken in
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some
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countries
, such as Norway, Sweden or Germany and it works
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very
well.
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People
don't throw the
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bottles
away, they collect them, give it back and
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get
a deposit back. It
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save
money and
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reduce
the amount of
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trash
.
Moreover
,
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some
Asian
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countries
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use
plastic
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bottles
as a method of payment for metro tickets. The have machines, where they can insert a
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bottle
instead
of cash or card and
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buy
a ticket.
Thus
, there is
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a lot of
ways that
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government
can
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help
to
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reduce
amount of trash.

In conclusion
, the number of producing rubbish is one of the biggest problems in our world. It affects
especially
our planet.
However
,
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some
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countries
already pay attention to this problem, more
is needed
to
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stop
producing
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trash
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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