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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.12

Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 12
Recently, waste management has been a matter of concern to most authorities with the continuous rise in the generation of rubbish. This is because of the technological advancement in food processing and preservation and this problem can be solved by creating a system to manage it properly. First and foremost, one of the problem is that food processing and preservation has witnessed profound advances in recent times with the advent of several styles of packaging food products such as canned, polythene and bottled meals amongst others. This has led to the production of all kinds of trash as people dispose them incessantly. To illustrate, most of the food freshly consumed by Nigerians are now been sold in a chemically transformed state and sealed in containers with no structure to manage the waste. As a result of this, the generated bye product keep increasing as food and drinks are being packaged in containers that are non-biodegradable. However, this challenge can be tackled by establishing a program for effective waste control. This system will employ the three point focus for controlling waste which includes: the provision of containers for clean trash disposal, destruction of biodegradable waste and recycling of non-biodegradable remnants. This will constitute an excellent structure for waste control. For instance, people who buy products packaged in polythene or plastics can discard it in the trash bin after which the authority can burn or bury the decomposable ones while the non-decaying remnants is recycled. Thus decreasing the amount of bye products generated. In conclusion, even though breakthrough in food making and storage technology in the form of sealed meals is responsible for the increase in waste production. This resultant set backs can be solved by initiating an effective waste appropriation project.
Recently,
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waste
management has been a matter of concern to most authorities with the continuous rise in the generation of rubbish. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the technological advancement in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
processing and preservation and this problem can
be solved
by creating a system to manage it
properly
.

First
and foremost, one of the problem is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
processing and preservation has witnessed profound advances in recent times with the advent of several styles of packaging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
such as canned, polythene and bottled meals amongst others. This has led to the production of all kinds of trash as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
dispose them
incessantly
. To illustrate, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
freshly
consumed by Nigerians are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
been sold
in a
chemically
transformed state and sealed in containers with no structure to manage the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
.
As a result
of this, the generated bye
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
increasing as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
and drinks are
being packaged
in containers that are non-biodegradable.

However
, this challenge can
be tackled
by establishing a program for effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
control. This system will employ the three point focus for controlling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
which includes: the provision of containers for clean trash disposal, destruction of biodegradable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
and recycling of non-biodegradable remnants. This will constitute an excellent structure for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
control.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
packaged in polythene or plastics can discard it in the trash bin after which the authority can burn or bury the decomposable ones while the non-decaying remnants
is recycled
.
Thus
decreasing the amount of bye
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
generated.

In conclusion
,
even though
breakthrough in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
making and storage technology in the form of sealed meals is responsible for the increase in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
production. This resultant set backs can
be solved
by initiating an effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
appropriation project.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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