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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.10

Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 10
The litter free country could be a big blessing for any country. But, people create more rubbish instead of cleaning. They use a lot of products who are just creating rubbish other then giving benefits and this thing creates a lot of trouble for any country like pollution and health related issues which occurs due to this rubbish. I personally agree with this above mention statement and I will prove this by giving examples of Oxford University research and Time Magazine Survey to demonstrate points and prove arguments. Firstly, rubbish produce due to most of the things which now a day easily available in any market and people chooses them as they cost less. But, in the result it produces a lot of mess which harmful of any living species are either those are animals, sea creatures or humans. For example, according to the Oxford University research in 2010 proved that 70% of pollution created due to rubbish items which we use mostly in our daily routine. So, in the above mentioned example, it is proved that people use more rubbish now a days. Secondly, due to this rubbish now we are facing a lot of trouble regarding air pollution, water pollution. There is a lot of disease which comes due to usage of rubbish product another example of a Times Magazine survey of 2012 shows that 30% of environmental pollutions occurs due to usage of plastic products. So, the government should take steps against the companies who introduce such rubbish in the markets. Also, the government should start campaigns related to the awareness of what's good for use and what is not so, that people could understand the importance of using right and wrong in daily usage product and stop using that rubbish product which are easy to purchase but, harmful for the health and the environment.
The litter free country could be a
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blessing for any country.
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But
,
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people
create more
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rubbish
instead
of cleaning. They
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use
a
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lot
of
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products
who are
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just
creating
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rubbish
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other then
giving benefits and this thing creates a
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lot
of trouble for any country like
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pollution
and health related issues which occurs
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due
to this
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rubbish
. I
personally
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agree
with this above mention statement and I will prove this by giving
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examples
of Oxford University research and Time Magazine Survey to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

Firstly
,
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rubbish
produce
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due
to most of the things which
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now
a day
easily
available in any market and
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people
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chooses
them as they cost less.
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But
, in the result it produces a
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lot
of mess which harmful of any living species are either those are animals, sea creatures or humans. For
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example
, according to the Oxford University research in 2010 proved that 70% of
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pollution
created
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due
to
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rubbish
items which we
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use
mostly
in our daily routine.
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, in the above mentioned
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example
, it
is proved
that
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people
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use
more
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rubbish
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now a days
.

Secondly
,
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due
to this
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rubbish
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now
we are facing a
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lot
of trouble regarding air
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pollution
, water
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pollution
. There is a
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lot
of disease which
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comes
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due
to usage of
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rubbish
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product
another
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example
of a Times Magazine survey of 2012
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shows
that 30% of environmental
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pollutions
occurs
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due
to usage of plastic products.

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, the
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government
should take steps against the
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companies
who introduce such
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rubbish
in the markets.
Also
, the
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government
should
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start
campaigns related to the awareness of what's
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good
for
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use
and what is not
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so
, that
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people
could understand the importance of using right and
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wrong
in daily usage
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product
and
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stop
using that
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rubbish
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product
which are easy to
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purchase
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but
, harmful for the health and the environment.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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