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Now days we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v.1

Now days we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 1
Today, every country around the word has a common problem with increasing amount of garbage. These garbage produce in many ways and unfortunately, have bad effect on ecosystem. If governments and individuals do not try to reduce this problem, in future we have more problems. There are many reasons for increasing amount of rubbish. First of all, today, we have more population than the past. This overpopulation produces more garbage. Secondly, as we know nature can absorb all natural things such as foods, vegetables, dead body and so on. All these kind of garbage are good for nature, but today we use some material like plastic's bag and nature cannot absorb plastic. We use more and more unnatural elements. In addition, people become more consumer than the past. In the past people try to find a new way to use all old stuff, but now we just looking for new and better devices. We do not like reuse old device especially old electronic device, so just throw out them. In my opinion, government should better start to reduce rubbish. They can do it in some simple ways. One of these ways is, teach people to reduce using of unnatural material and replace them with something else. For example, we can use paper bag instead of plastic bag in supermarkets. Also they can teach people to dividing their rubbish into natural parts, bottle part and so on. Consequently, all natural material can reuse again. To sum up, in my opinion, both governments and individuals must pay more attention to reducing rubbish. Rubbish is a big treat for our ecosystem. It causes a lot of problem such as increasing some disease, increasing pollution, so we must collaborate with governments to solve this problem.
Today
, every country around the word has a common
problem
with
increasing
amount of garbage.
These garbage
produce in
many
ways
and unfortunately, have
bad
effect on ecosystem. If
governments
and individuals do not try to
reduce
this
problem
, in future we have more problems.

There are
many
reasons for
increasing
amount of
rubbish
.
First of all
,
today
, we have more population than the past. This overpopulation produces more garbage.
Secondly
, as we know nature can absorb all natural things such as foods, vegetables, dead body and
so
on. All
these kind
of garbage are
good
for nature,
but
today
we
use
some
material
like plastic's bag and nature cannot absorb plastic. We
use
more and more unnatural elements.

In addition
,
people
become more consumer than the past. In the past
people
try to find a new
way
to
use
all
old
stuff,
but
now
we
just
looking for new and better devices. We do not like reuse
old
device
especially
old
electronic device,
so
just
throw out them.

In my opinion,
government
should better
start
to
reduce
rubbish
. They can do it in
some
simple
ways
. One of these
ways
is, teach
people
to
reduce
using of unnatural material and replace them with something else.
For example
, we can
use
paper bag
instead
of plastic bag in supermarkets.
Also
they can teach
people
to
dividing
their
rubbish
into natural parts, bottle part and
so
on.
Consequently
, all natural material can reuse again.

To sum up, in my opinion, both
governments
and individuals
must
pay more attention to reducing
rubbish
.
Rubbish
is a
big
treat for our ecosystem. It causes
a lot of
problem
such as
increasing
some
disease,
increasing
pollution,
so
we
must
collaborate with
governments
to solve this
problem
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Now days we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6
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