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5. Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v.1

5. Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v. 1
These days, every country around the word has a common problem with increasing amount of garbage. These garbage is produced in many ways has a bad effect on the ecosystem. Some people believe that the The state can help decrease waste production by educating the public and by promoting recycling. In this essay, I will discuss reasons for increase in waste production and also suggest some measures to mitigate the problem. First of all, To begin with, increased use of packaged items is one of the main causes of excessive production of rubbish. For Example Companies nowadays use a variety of packaging materials such as plastic, polythene and rubber the materials used in preparing these packets are mostly non-biodegradable and they do not decompose. If the authority does not take necessary steps to eradicate these kind of waste, then our future generations will suffer with inadequate resources. On the other hand, there is a common belief that if the ministry encourages the Factories to produce environmental friendly products by providing financial supported and giving tax advantages it leads to betterment of nature. For instance, in Australia, where machines are installed and people can buy a food item by just submitting used plastic bottles. These kinds of encouragement activities and events influence people to recycle. As a result, it gives hope for the future human beings and our planet In Conclusion, Although it is a common thought that the union can reduce this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling. Personally, I think everyone should work towards safeguarding of nature.
These days, every country around the word has a common problem with increasing amount of garbage.
Did you mean "this garbage" or "These garbages"?
These garbage
is produced
in
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many
ways has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effect on the ecosystem.
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Some
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people
believe that
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the The
state can
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help
decrease waste production by educating the public and by promoting recycling.

In this essay, I will discuss reasons for increase in waste production and
also
suggest
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some
measures to mitigate the problem.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, To
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begin
with, increased
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use
of packaged items is one of the main causes of excessive production of rubbish.
For Example
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Companies
nowadays
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use
a variety of packaging materials such as plastic, polythene and rubber the materials
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used
in preparing these packets are
mostly
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
non-biodegradable and
they do not decompose. If the authority does not take necessary steps to eradicate
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of waste, then our future generations will suffer with inadequate resources.

On the other hand
, there is a common belief that if the ministry encourages the Factories to produce environmental friendly products by providing financial supported and giving tax advantages it leads to betterment of nature.
For instance
, in Australia, where machines
are installed
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a food item by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
submitting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
plastic bottles. These kinds of encouragement activities and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
influence
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to recycle.
As a result
, it gives hope for the future human beings and our
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planet


In Conclusion
, Although it is a common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that the union can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
this growing problem by implementing stringent laws and by promoting recycling.
Personally
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
everyone should work towards safeguarding of nature.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 5. Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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