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The charts below the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The data illustrates the primary reasons that drive different age students to study and the associated support provided by employers. Overall, studying for career and for interest show a totally reverse trend with the age of students grows, as a considerable amount of students under 26 study for their future jobs while the most students over 49 choose interest as the main reason. The support received by different age groups fluctuates. However, it can be seen that employers are more willing to provide support to students under26. To be more specific, nearly 80% of students younger than 26 study for career, which is about eight times more than its counterparts who consider more about their interest. By comparison, the majority of students over 49 choose interest as their primary reason to study. Moreover, two times as many as students between 30-39 studying for career than studying than studying for interest, whilst these two reasons are chosen by an equal portion of students who are in their 40-49. As for employer support, it fluctuates with age grows. Firstly, more than 60% of students under 26 receive support from their employer. This portion decreased to its bottom at just over 30% in 30-39 age group, and then increased to slightly more than a half when students are older than 49.
The data illustrates the primary
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age
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study
and the associated
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support
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studying
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interest
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age
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students
under 26
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study
for their future jobs while the most
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students
over 49 choose
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interest
as the main
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reason
. The
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support
received by
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age
groups fluctuates.
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support
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students
under26.

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nearly
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students
younger than 26
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study
for career, which is about eight times more than its counterparts who consider more about their
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interest
. By comparison, the majority of
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students
over 49 choose
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interest
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.
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students
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for career than
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for
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, whilst these two
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reasons
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students
who are in their 40-49.

As for employer
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, it fluctuates with
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age
grows.
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, more than 60% of
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students
under 26 receive
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from their employer. This portion decreased to its bottom at
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over 30% in 30-39
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age
group, and then increased to
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students
are older than 49.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS academic The charts below the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
218 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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