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The charts below the main reason for study among students of different age groups and amount of support they received from employeers. v.2

The charts below the main reason for study among students of different age groups and amount of support they received from employeers. v. 2
The charts below describe how the different age group can influence on reason of study and employer support, while over 49 aged groups have the hugest motivation for studying came from the interesting reason. To begin with the career as reason of student for studying has the biggest rate which is 80 people under 26 years old stood. Secondly, the group of 26-29 aged student also dominated by career to motivate their study. Furthermore, there are over 50 people aged above 30-39 decided stood in career. On the other hands, student 40-49 aged have same total of people who choose both career and interesting. Next there are 70 people over 49 years old picked interesting while just about 19 people vote a career. Following by the different age group could be effected on employer support more than 60 people under 26 age are able to get time off and help with fees, while the number of people who 30-39 aged have less than 40 employers support.
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can influence on reason of study and employer support, while over 49
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have the hugest motivation for studying came from the interesting reason.

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to motivate their study.
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people
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above 30-39 decided stood in
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. On the other hands, student 40-49
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have same total of
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who choose both
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and interesting.
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over 49 years
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picked interesting while
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about 19
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vote a career.

Following by the
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under 26 age are able to
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who 30-39
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have less than 40 employers support.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below the main reason for study among students of different age groups and amount of support they received from employeers. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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