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The charts below shows the main reasons for study among students of differen age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below shows the main reasons for study among students of differen age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The first graph shows that there is a gradual decrease in study for career reasons with age. Nearly 80% of students under 26 years, study for their career. This percentage gradually declines by 10-20% every decade. Only 40% of 40-49 years olds and 18% of over 29 year olds are studying for career reasons in late adulthood. Conversely, the first graph also shows that study stemming from interest increases with age. There are only 10% of under 26 years olds studying out of interest. The percentage increases slowly till the beginning of the fourth decade, and increases dramatically in late adulthood. Nearly same number of 40-49 years olds study for interest in comparison to 18% studying for career reasons in that age group. The second graph shows that employer support is maximum (approximately 60%) for the under 26 years students. It drops rapidly to 32% up to the third decade of life, and then increases in late adulthood up to about 44%. It is unclear whether employer support is only for career-focuced study, but the highest level is for those students who mainly study for career purposes.
The
first
graph
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shows
that there is a gradual decrease in
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study
for
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career
reasons with age.
Nearly
80% of students under 26 years,
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study
for their
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career
. This percentage
gradually
declines by 10-20% every decade.
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Only
40% of 40-49 years olds and 18% of over 29
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year
olds are studying for
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career
reasons in late adulthood.

Conversely
, the
first
graph
also
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shows
that
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study
stemming from interest
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increases
with age. There are
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only
10% of under 26 years olds studying out of interest. The percentage
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increases
slowly
till the beginning of the fourth decade, and
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increases
dramatically
in late adulthood.
Nearly
same number of 40-49 years olds
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study
for interest
in comparison
to 18% studying for
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career
reasons in that age group. The second graph
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shows
that employer support is maximum (approximately 60%) for the under 26 years students. It drops
rapidly
to 32% up to the third decade of life, and then
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increases
in late adulthood up to about 44%. It is unclear whether employer support is
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only
for
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career-focuced
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study
,
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but
the highest level is for those students who
mainly
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study
for
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purposes.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below shows the main reasons for study among students of differen age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

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187 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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