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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v.55

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 55
In the global warming period, it is argued that an ecological crisis should be given in the top priority while some contend that other environmental problems are most important. Although both of them impact on each other, I completely agree that many environmental issues need to be solved before the loss of species. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why we consider the survival of species. This change causes a domino effect on the fragile ecosystems because there is a strong symbiosis between plants and animals. The extinction of one species can lead to a lack of food resources for other species. Taking the predator is lion as an example, what would happen if one day they struggle with their primary food such as deers, antelopes disappear, they will scramble other animals for living or even endanger on the secure of people living nearby. The whole underground and underwater ecosystem can face a catastrophic disruption if the authorities don’t have strict measures to prevent. On the other hand, we can intervene in the extinction of biodiversity by taking action on other environmental issues. Firstly, global warming leading to forest fires or melting glaciers in many regions, which cause the death of animal and plant species and the destruction of natural habitat. For instance, the biggest tropical forest is Amazon, which has reached record-breaking over 80000 forest fires recently. Secondly, many rivers and oceans were polluted by releasing fossil fuels and forms of plastic over the years; this could lead to high sea level and depletes marine animals as well, a typical is blue whales which are on the brink of extinction. In conclusion, protecting the survival of animals and plants species is protecting our humanity. However, I still agree that other environmental problems should be high on the agenda
In the global warming period, it
is argued
that an ecological crisis should be
given
in the top priority while
some
contend that
other
environmental
problems are most
important
. Although both of them impact on each
other
, I completely
agree
that
many
environmental
issues need to
be solved
before
the loss of species.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why we consider the survival of species. This
change
causes a domino effect on the fragile ecosystems
because
there is a strong symbiosis between plants and
animals
. The extinction of one species can lead to a lack of food resources for
other
species. Taking the predator is lion as an example, what would happen if one day they struggle with their primary food such as
deers
, antelopes disappear, they will scramble
other
animals
for living or even endanger on
the secure of
people
living nearby. The whole underground and underwater ecosystem can face a catastrophic disruption if the authorities don’t have strict measures to
prevent
.

On the
other
hand, we can intervene in the extinction of biodiversity by taking action on
other
environmental
issues.
Firstly
, global warming leading to forest fires or melting glaciers in
many
regions, which cause the death of
animal
and plant species and the destruction of natural habitat.
For instance
, the biggest tropical forest is Amazon, which has reached record-breaking over 80000 forest fires recently.
Secondly
,
many
rivers and oceans
were polluted
by releasing fossil fuels and forms of plastic over the years; this could lead to high sea level and depletes marine
animals
as well
,
a typical
is blue whales which are on the brink of extinction.

In conclusion
, protecting the survival of
animals
and plants species is protecting our humanity.
However
, I
still
agree
that
other
environmental
problems should be high on the agenda
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. v. 55

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4 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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