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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.95

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations 95
People often face to many problematic circumstances in the life. Some people think that we had better take root in dreadful results, while others believe that the best way is that making an effort in overcome awful things and try to find solutions to deal with problems. In the scope of this essay, both of views will be thoroughly discussed, personally, I completely agree with the second view. On the one hand, sometimes many people have to put up with the bad situation to have stable income and comfort in their life. For example, there are many graduated students from famous university can not find the job which matches their university major, so that they might approve of unexpected underpaid works or even they may receive ungrateful treatment at work. Nonetheless, getting the constant salary to pay the cost of living such as electric bills, the money of renting house encourages them to keep up support the terrible jobs. Furthermore, earning money with the modest amount of money but gaining a lot of happiness would be better than having more money from illegal activities. Therefore, accepting the current situation many be the better solution for some people not than refusing valuable things make the such vast ambitions in the future. On the other hand, taking the best attempts to overcome current disappointing conditions would be rewarded with the greater career. For instance, in my neighborhood, there was a student who was born in a poor family, his parents were farmers and did not have enough money to pay for fees if he had gone to the university. It was admirable that he try his best in study and gained the scholarship of his favorite university and became an official student. After that, by his efforts every day, when he graduated, he became a professional doctor as he desired and has earned a lot of money per month. Thence, he and his parents have had a more wonderful life with adequate convenience. Thus, the more harder you try, the more success you do. In conclusion, in some typical conditions, people would know what the best solution is by accepting the current situation or trying and improving such situation. Each of them might bring both physical and mental benefits for people.
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problematic circumstances in the life.
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people
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that we had better take root in dreadful results, while others believe that the
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best
way is that making an effort in overcome awful things and try to find solutions to deal with problems. In the scope of this essay, both of views will be
thoroughly
discussed,
personally
, I completely
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agree
with the second view.

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people
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have to
put up with the
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bad
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to have stable income and comfort in their life.
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, there are
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many
graduated students from
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famous
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university
can not find the job which matches their
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university
major,
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that they might approve of unexpected underpaid works or even they may receive ungrateful treatment at work. Nonetheless, getting the constant salary to pay the cost of living such as electric bills, the
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money
of renting
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house
encourages them to
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up support the terrible jobs.
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with the modest amount of
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but
gaining
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happiness would be better than having more
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from illegal activities.
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, accepting the
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current
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situation
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many
be the better solution for
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some
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people
not than refusing valuable things
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make
the such vast ambitions in the future.

On the other hand
, taking the
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best
attempts to overcome
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current
disappointing conditions would
be rewarded
with the greater career.
For instance
, in my neighborhood, there was a student who
was born
in a poor family, his parents were farmers and did not have
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enough
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money
to pay for fees if he had gone to the
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university
. It was admirable that he try his
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best
in study and gained the scholarship of his favorite
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university
and became an official student. After that, by his efforts every day, when he graduated, he became a professional doctor as he desired and has earned
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a lot of
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money
per month. Thence, he and his parents have had a more wonderful life with adequate convenience.
Thus
, the
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more harder
you try, the more success you do.

In conclusion
, in
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typical conditions,
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people
would know what the
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solution is by accepting the
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current
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situation
or trying and improving such
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. Each of them might bring both physical and mental benefits for
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people
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations 95

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4 paragraphs
379 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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