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People today move to new cities or new countries more than ever before. What challenges do they experience? What strategies are there to meet these challenges? v.2

People today move to new cities or new countries more than ever before. What challenges do they experience? What strategies are there to meet these challenges? v. 2
In recent days masses prefer to migrate to a new destination as compared to the past. There are two principal problems for this, difficult to reintegrate in a new lifestyle and can' t adopt the climatic condition of a new place of arrival. This essay would like to configure more details about the problem and suggest some possible strategies to tackle this issue. One of the major problem caused by migration is difficult to reintegrate in a new society as well as lifestyle. Because of this folks seem to unable to make proper housing which obviously forges plenty of obstacles. For instance, a recent survey by United Nation Organization showed, around half the proportion of international migrants are supposed to have faced enormous adversity throughout their stay, especially to aging people, as they are unknown about the foreign languages. To solve this issue, they must be well aware of the popular trend in recent place and should adopt it as soon as possible. Consequently, masses can experience abundant of difference and aid to ameliorate the living standard. Another hurdle that needs to be considered is people find difficult to adopt the climatic condition of a new place. As a result, they may face a plethora of infections which definitely bring untoward repercussions. There is ample evidence to suggest that, in the context of Nepal, hilly and mountain region migrants can face numerous problems during their stay in the Terai region, as they are not used to live in such sunny weather. One possible remedial measure could be, following a popular trend with the change in climatic condition. Therefore, they can experience a standard lifestyle. As such it could be concluded that masses can face a host of hurdles after migration alike, difficult to adopt present lifestyle and climatic challenges. However, accepting popular trend can tackle these problems.
In recent days masses prefer to migrate to a
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new
destination as compared to the past. There are two principal
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problems
for this,
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difficult
to reintegrate in a
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new
lifestyle and
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climatic
condition of a
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new
place of arrival. This essay would like to configure more
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details
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problem
and suggest
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some
possible strategies to tackle this issue.

One of the major
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problem
caused by migration is
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difficult
to reintegrate in a
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new
society
as well
as lifestyle.
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folks seem
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to unable to
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make
proper housing which
obviously
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plenty
of obstacles.
For instance
, a recent survey by United Nation Organization
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showed
, around half the proportion of international migrants
are supposed
to have faced enormous adversity throughout their stay,
especially
to aging
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people
, as they are unknown about the foreign languages. To solve this issue, they
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must
be well aware of the popular trend in recent place and should
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adopt
it as
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soon
as possible.
Consequently
, masses can experience abundant of difference and aid to ameliorate the living standard.

Another hurdle that needs to
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people
find
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the
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climatic
condition of a
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new
place.
As a result
, they may face a plethora of infections which definitely bring untoward repercussions. There is ample evidence to suggest that, in the context of Nepal, hilly and mountain region migrants can face numerous
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problems
during their stay in the
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Terai
region, as they are not
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used
to
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live
in such sunny weather. One possible remedial measure could be, following a popular trend with the
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change
in
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climatic
condition.
Therefore
, they can experience a standard lifestyle.

As such it could
be concluded
that masses can face a host of hurdles after migration alike,
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difficult
to
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adopt
present lifestyle and
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climatic
challenges.
However
, accepting popular trend can tackle these
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problems
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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Victor Hugo

IELTS academic People today move to new cities or new countries more than ever before. What challenges do they experience? What strategies are there to meet these challenges? v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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