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The proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

The proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The graph illustrates how the proportion of population aged 65 and over changed over 1940 and 2040 in Japan, Sweden and the USA. The most noticeable trend is, regardless being quite similar in all three countries in 1940, the proportion of elder people has sharply increased, and is expected to increase even more, in Sweden and the USA, while it experienced a fall in Japan. In 1940, all of the countries’ population had 5-10 % of poeple over 65. Until 2000, the USA and Sweden had a similar increasing trend. However, after the year 2000, this percentage saw a noticeable growth in Sweden, rising from 15 percent to 20. The USA, on the other hand, did not experience the same climb. Instead, the share of elderly people in the population remanied mainly stable until 2020. Despite this, in both countries, this proportion is expected to grow to 25% by the year 2040. Japan’s population experienced a different change. Ratio of people over 65, started at 5% in 1940 and kept decreasing until 2000. That said, this ratio grew significantly after this year and doubled the amount in 1940, with 10%. Moreover, it is expected to be higher than both Sweden and the USA by 2020. Overall, all three countries have one trend in common. Though, there are differences in between, they all will have a higher ratio of elderly people over the course of a century.
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Overall Band Score: 6.5
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6.5
Main features and trends have been identified, but there's an inaccuracy concerning Japan's trend by 2020.
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6
While there is some variety in vocabulary used, there are several repetitions and occasional misuse of words (e.g., 'poeple').
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6.5
The writing has a clear organization with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, transitions such as 'On the other hand' are used without clear prior setup, affecting the flow.
Grammatical Range
6
Simple and complex sentence structures are present, but errors in spelling and agreement affect accuracy.

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