Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear opinion, but it could benefit from more detailed examples and a stronger conclusion that summarizes the main points.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety and sophistication. There are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies in word choice.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical structure, but some ideas could be better connected. The use of cohesive devices is present but not always effective.
Grammatical Range
The grammatical structures used are mostly correct, but there is a lack of complexity in sentence structures. More varied sentence types could enhance the writing.