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Some people believe that it s good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and giv v.2

Some people believe that it s good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. 2
Scientists can save time using data from other researchers to verify a new theory. Businessmen can benefit from cooperation with other companies by sharing information. Students can gain more when discussing problems with partners, exchanging ideas. However, views may vary greatly on whether all information can be shared. Some people contend that information about scientific research, business and other academic studies can facilitate the development in those fields. For example, it is a waste of time for a biologist to count the number of species in a certain place by himself. However, with other reports about the flora and fauna species from other researchers, there is no need for the biologist to do this time-consuming work, which saves precious time and enables him to concentrate on addressing the ecosystem problems. In addition, exchanging information can boost the economy. For instance, the camera has become an indispensable part of a mobile phone. Nowadays, Oppo, a well-known smartphone company chooses to work with another company which is famous for its excellent camera. After exchanging ideas about the design and technology about the camera, both companies have seen considerable rises in their sales. Both can profit a lot from this cooperation. However, others maintain that not all information can be shared in that some can be classified and crucial. For example, a profitable restaurant can be so competitive mainly due to its special flavor which attracts regular customers. If the boss shares the secret of specialties with others, I believe that other restaurants are capable of making the same profits or even going beyond that restaurant. Besides, the manufacturing process of the car is also confidential. That is why the vehicle engines differ greatly in different countries. In my opinion, in scientific field, scientists need to share information as much as possible for the sake of stimulating and making contributions to the development altogether, while in other fields where everyone is in the competition like business companies, some information should be kept secretly.
Scientists can save time using data from
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other
researchers to verify a new theory. Businessmen can benefit from cooperation with
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other
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companies
by sharing
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information
. Students can gain more when discussing problems with partners, exchanging
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ideas
.
However
, views may vary
greatly
on whether all
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information
can
be shared
.

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Some
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people
contend that
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information
about scientific research, business and
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other
academic studies can facilitate the development in those fields.
For example
, it is a waste of time for a biologist to count the number of species in a certain place by himself.
However
, with
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other
reports about the flora and fauna species from
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other
researchers, there is no need for the biologist to do this time-consuming work, which saves precious time and enables him to concentrate on addressing the ecosystem problems.
In addition
, exchanging
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information
can boost the economy.
For instance
, the camera has become an indispensable part of a mobile phone. Nowadays,
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Oppo
, a well-known smartphone
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company
chooses to work with another
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company
which is
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famous
for its excellent camera. After exchanging
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ideas
about the design and technology about the camera, both
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companies
have
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seen
considerable rises in their sales. Both can profit a lot from this cooperation.

However
, others maintain that not all
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information
can
be shared
in that
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some
can
be classified
and crucial.
For example
, a profitable restaurant can be
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so
competitive
mainly
due to its special flavor which attracts regular customers. If the boss shares the secret of specialties with others, I believe that
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other
restaurants are capable of making the same profits or even going beyond that restaurant.
Besides
, the manufacturing process of the car is
also
confidential.
That is
why the vehicle engines differ
greatly
in
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different
countries.

In my opinion, in scientific field, scientists need to share
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
as much as possible for the sake of stimulating and making contributions to the development altogether, while in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
fields where everyone is in the competition like business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
secretly
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it s good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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