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Some people believe that it is good to share as much informationas possible in scientific research, business and the academicworld. Others believe that some information is too important ortoo valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give v.1

Some people believe that it is good to share as much informationas possible in scientific research, business and the academicworld. Others believe that some information is too important ortoo valuable to be shared freely. 1
As sharing is happiness, especial exchanging academic information can give a tremendous impetus of human beings' civilization. However, some individuals do not share this view who say because the academic research endures long-term cycle to approach it preciously, these should not be shared without charge. This essay agree that information need to pay. This essay is going to discuss the both views firstly and secondly analyze why exchanging information freely is harmful for people' s learning ability and enthusiasm. Sharing people' s information play an inadequate part in human beings' history. If people were not shared what they have approached information, civilization would never come up from the horizon across the entire world undoubtedly. The wisdom communicate what they thinking in the ancient age while people exchange their science widely since the Renaissance while individuals shipped their freights since the Industrial age, and today' s Information age ascribes to the telecommunication. Therefore, the whole history of mankind is a story about exchange people' s thinking, cargoes, science and technology. However, the freedom and free sharing information can spoil the benefits of authors even destroying their creativity of the entire society. As the world approaches the Information age, the occupation is classified more detail than before every time, so both academic researcher and novel writer is kinds of career who depend on their skill to live. However, their works, such as novels, music scripts, research papers, and so on, mean those people' s bread, house, bill. Provided their works continue to pirate, they will give up their creative career. The human beings' society have to embrace the dark age because authors, musicians, engineers, and scientific researchers are horsework to creativity. Thus, information should be protected, that is no authorizing copyright no sharing qualification. This essay outweighs paying sharing against free sharing. Accessing knowledge or business freely can dispute people' s learning enthusiasm and ability. First of all, if people can easily and freely access knowledge, they might not respect knowledge any more. Secondly, people might just download freely materials from the Internet, but they reluctant to learn. Thereby, the knowledge of human beings can not update, so mankind' s progress will be stagnating. To recapitulate, sharing information benefits human beings' development, but no authorized behavior can destroy the creativity of the whole society. Additionally, piracy make people lose the learning ability, resulting in that people have to embrace dark age.
As
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is happiness, especial exchanging academic
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information
can give a tremendous impetus of
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beings&
#039; civilization.
However
,
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some
individuals do not share this view who say
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because
the academic research endures long-term cycle to approach it
preciously
, these should not
be shared
without charge. This essay
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agree
that
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information
need to pay. This essay is going to discuss the both views
firstly
and
secondly
analyze why exchanging
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information
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freely
is harmful for
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people&
#039; s learning ability and enthusiasm.

Sharing
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people&
#039; s
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information
play an inadequate part in
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beings&
#039; history. If
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people
were not shared what they have approached
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information
, civilization would never
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come
up from the horizon across the entire world
undoubtedly
. The wisdom communicate what
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they thinking
in the ancient
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age
while
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people
exchange their science
widely
since the Renaissance while individuals shipped their freights since the Industrial
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age
, and
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today&
#039; s
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Information
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age
ascribes to the telecommunication.
Therefore
, the whole history of mankind is a story about exchange
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people&
#039; s thinking, cargoes, science and technology.

However
, the freedom and free
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sharing
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information
can spoil the benefits of authors even destroying their creativity of the entire society. As the world approaches the
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Information
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age
, the occupation
is classified
more detail than
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before
every time,
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so
both academic researcher and novel writer is kinds of career who depend on their
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skill
to
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live
.
However
, their works, such as novels, music scripts, research papers, and
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so
on, mean those
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people&
#039; s bread,
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house
, bill. Provided their works continue to pirate, they will give up their creative career. The
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human
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beings&
#039; society
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have to
embrace the dark
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age
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because
authors, musicians, engineers, and scientific researchers are
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horsework
to creativity.
Thus
,
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information
should
be protected
,
that is
no authorizing copyright no
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sharing
qualification.

This essay outweighs paying
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sharing
against free
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sharing
. Accessing
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knowledge
or business
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freely
can dispute
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people&
#039; s learning enthusiasm and ability.
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First of all
, if
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people
can
easily
and
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freely
access
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knowledge
, they might not respect
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knowledge
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any more
.
Secondly
,
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people
might
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just
download
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freely
materials from the Internet,
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but
they reluctant to learn. Thereby, the
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knowledge
of
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human
beings can not update,
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so
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mankind&
#039; s progress will be stagnating.

To recapitulate,
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sharing
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information
benefits
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beings&
#039; development,
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but
no authorized behavior can
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destroy
the creativity of the whole society.
Additionally
, piracy
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make
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people
lose the learning ability, resulting in that
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people
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have to
embrace dark
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age
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
Knowledge of languages is the doorway to wisdom.
Roger Bacon

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much informationas possible in scientific research, business and the academicworld. Others believe that some information is too important ortoo valuable to be shared freely. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
399 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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