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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. other believe that some information is to important or too valuable to share freely. v.43

some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. other believe that some information is to important or too valuable to share freely. v. 43
Many people have claimed that every scientific, academic or even business is it available to let other know while some people is definitely disagree. In this essay I will argue it is should or should not, if it is, what is the following result that might come next. In my opinion, learning a new stuffs whether it is academic or not, is it good anyway. So if it is about science thing such as a new chemical water that come with new modified plant, can be burnt your skin, therefore if people know about it. This damages from this thing is prevented to hurt anyone. In contrast, what if it's all about the end of the world like in the movie called 2012. People might go wild and panic. They are despaired and all of his/her money that is saved from the day they get first salary might be used in nonsense stuff, because they are believed that they will not have a change to use it, then spend it now. Moreover, for a business stuff. If you open a huge company with the existence of varying enemy, some of them might use those information that is able for anyone to know use it to destroy your company. To conclude, I strongly disagree to let everyone get into scientific, business and some of academic knowledge, without exception. It can cause a lot of disaster in the future. Thus, we have to concede some of those to prevent bad things, caused by has known something we should not know it.
Many
people
have claimed that every scientific, academic or even business is it available to
let
other
know
while
some
people
is
definitely
disagree
. In this essay I will argue it
is
should or should not, if it is, what is the following result that
might
come
next
.

In my opinion, learning a new
stuffs
whether it is academic or not, is it
good
anyway.
So
if it is about science thing such as
a new chemical water
that
come
with new modified plant, can
be burnt
your skin,
therefore
if
people
know
about it. This damages from this thing is
prevented
to hurt anyone.

In contrast
, what if it's all about the
end
of the world like in the movie called 2012.
People
might
go wild and panic. They
are despaired
and all of his/her money that
is saved
from the day they
get
first
salary
might
be
used
in nonsense stuff,
because
they
are believed
that they will not have a
change
to
use
it, then spend it
now
.
Moreover
, for a business stuff. If you open a huge
company
with the existence of varying enemy,
some
of them
might
use
those information
that is
able for anyone to
know
use
it to
destroy
your
company
.

To conclude
, I
strongly
disagree to
let
everyone
get
into scientific, business and
some
of academic knowledge, without exception. It can cause
a lot of
disaster in the future.
Thus
, we
have to
concede
some
of those to
prevent
bad
things, caused by has known something we should not
know
it.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. other believe that some information is to important or too valuable to share freely. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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