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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 2
The issue of whether information should be shared all the time amog studies and businesses or if people should keep it for themselves because it is too important have been widely debated. In this essay I will discuss both sides and explain why I personally believe that is a positive attitude when people share information. On the one hand, there are some people who think that information should not be shared all the time. The central reason is twofold, firstly there are some kind of information that is too personal to share with others. Secondly, if confidential information is known by the wrong person, it will not result in a good way. For example, in a Brazil, many people use the same password in different devices such as tablet, cell phone or computer. If a friend borrowed one of the devices and tells to another person the password, this information can be used against the owner. Therefore, this kind of information should never be shared in any situation. On the other hand, when it comes to research or business the information must be shared. In other words, when the main idea is to help or improve a studycase or a project people should add all informatio n they have available to them. For instance, many companies when start a new project do a “brainstorm” to gather as many different information they can, in order to launch a new product or service. As a result, all individuals experiences and knowledge are important in that case. That is way is relevant to share as much information as possible when people have the opportunity. In conclusion, although some information is personal and people should not share with others, there are many other information which contributes to the academic or business environment that must be shared.
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people
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who
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information
should not be
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all the time. The central reason is twofold,
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that is
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with others.
Secondly
, if confidential
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information
is known
by the
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wrong
person, it will not result in a
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way.
For example
, in a Brazil,
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people
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use
the same password in
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different
devices such as tablet, cell phone or computer. If a friend borrowed one of the devices and
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tells
to another person the password, this
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information
can be
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used
against the owner.
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, this kind of
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information
should never be
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shared
in any situation.

On the
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hand, when it
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to research or business the
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information
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be
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. In
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idea
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a
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or a project
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people
should
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all
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they have available to them.
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,
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companies
when
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a new project do a “brainstorm” to gather as
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many
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they can, in order to launch a new product or service.
As a result
, all individuals experiences and knowledge are
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important
in that case
.
That is
way is relevant to
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as much
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information
as possible when
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people
have the opportunity.

In conclusion
, although
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is personal and
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should not
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with others, there are
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which contributes to the academic or business environment that
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must
be
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18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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