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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v.17

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 17
The knowledge that someone gets about something is called information. In my opinion, all kinds of information, including scientific research, business and academic have to be shared among people in the best interest of human beings. In ancient times, people had very sincere relations among them. They not only shared information, but also exchanged goods among them in order to strengthen their relations as well as economy. In the present world, everyone is in hurry to lead the world in a specific field. Information sharing is very common nowadays in almost all the field of life like research, business, health and education. However, it is important to understand the nature of information while sharing it. For example, certain information like those regarding natural disasters, road accidents and harmful diseases require no delay in time. Such information must be spread immediately in order to save the lives of certain people. The recent advancements in Science and Technology have turned the whole world into a global village. It has now become essential to share and gain the information about the changing scenario of the world. The fastest means of communications like television, computer and the internet have enabled us to spread the urgent information across the globe within microseconds. If the progress of the world keeps in motion with such zeal and zest, then it will be possible to share and receive all the information instantly from each corner of the world. Thus, in my opinion, all types of information must be shared among people across the world. However, persons and institutions sharing information have to be careful about the correctness of what they share as information.
The knowledge that someone
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gets
about something
is called
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information
. In my opinion, all kinds of
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information
, including scientific research, business and academic
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have to
be shared
among
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people
in the best interest of human beings.

In ancient times,
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people
had
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very
sincere relations among them. They not
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only
shared
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information
,
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but
also
exchanged
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goods
among them in order to strengthen their relations
as well
as economy. In the present
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world
, everyone is in hurry to lead the
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world
in a specific field.
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Information
sharing is
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very
common nowadays in almost all the field of life like research, business, health and education.
However
, it is
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important
to understand the nature of
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information
while sharing it.
For example
, certain
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information
like those regarding natural disasters, road accidents and harmful diseases require no delay in time. Such
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information
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must
be spread
immediately in order to save the
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lives
of certain
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people
.

The recent advancements in Science and Technology have turned the whole
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world
into a global village. It has
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now
become essential to share and gain the
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information
about the changing scenario of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. The fastest means of communications like television, computer and the internet have enabled us to spread the urgent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
across the globe within microseconds. If the progress of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
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keeps
in motion with such zeal and zest, then it will be possible to share and receive all the
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information
instantly
from each corner of the world.

Thus
, in my opinion, all types of
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information
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be shared
among
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people
across the
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world
.
However
, persons and institutions sharing
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information
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have to
be careful about the correctness of what they share as
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information
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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