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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and five your opinion. v.6

Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely. v. 6
There are varieties of researchers in the world, and the investigators are shared that very easy to over the earth each investigate in the modern society by developing technology. I am describing that some advantages and some disadvantages in this state. To begin with, when the world has very serious issues such as COVID-19 that related people's and creatur's life. The government, scientists or other specialists need to share with the public the instruction or consequences as soon as possible. Because, the virus would be killed all people who live in the world and even there are lots of crisis to leave the animals. Also, it is possible that make vaccines in a year, if the specialist would share the result or intelligence. However, there is a lot of unreliable punishment in the public, and people can see the information by mobile app such as Facebook, Instagram or twitter. Thus, if the public trusted all of the words, even they can not screening the unreliable words. On the other hand, there are some companises which have a seacret such as Toyota, Apple, Sumsoung. The companies have to competition with other companies to make more appricant society. So they need protect the kowlege or inteligence from the publish. If the companies's empoloyee share the imformation to the public, he/she would be fire because it is hurmed action to the companies. In addition, some information is very valuable and these are not essential to share freely. To sum up, in my view, there is a lot of intelligence with the earth, and people can search very easily on the internet, so the specialists have responsibility the information are believable and confidence. I believe that all information is true and helpful to this modern society.
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are shared
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very
easy to over the earth each investigate in the modern society by developing technology. I am describing that
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some
advantages and
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some
disadvantages in this state.

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begin
with, when the world has
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very
serious issues such as COVID-19 that related
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people
's and
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creatur
's life. The
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government
, scientists or other specialists need to
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share
with the
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public
the instruction or consequences as
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soon
as possible.
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Because
, the virus would
be killed
all
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people
who
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live
in the world and even there are lots of crisis to
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leave
the animals.
Also
, it is possible that
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make
vaccines in a year, if the specialist would
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share
the result or intelligence.
However
, there is
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a lot of
unreliable punishment in the
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public
, and
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people
can
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see
the
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information
by mobile app such as Facebook, Instagram or twitter.
Thus
, if the
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public
trusted
Consider using "all the".
all of the
words, even they can not
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "screen"
screening
the unreliable words.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
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companises
which have a
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seacret
such as Toyota, Apple,
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Sumsoung
. The
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companies
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have to
competition with other
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companies
to
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make
more
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appricant
society.
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So
they need protect the
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kowlege
or
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inteligence
from the
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publish
. If the
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companies's
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empoloyee
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share
the
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imformation
to the
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public
, he/she would be fire
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because
it is
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hurmed
action to the
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companies
.
In addition
,
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some
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information
is
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very
valuable and these are not essential to
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share
freely
.

To sum up, in my view, there is
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a lot of
intelligence with the earth, and
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people
can search
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very
easily
on the internet,
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so
the specialists have responsibility the
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information
are believable and confidence. I believe that all
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information
is true and helpful to this modern society.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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