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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.10

Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 10
Knowledge is power. Freedom of expression and speech is a crucial part of most modern societies. Within this culture, many people believe that by sharing information freely among all humanity, the future of the world is enhanced. Although some reasons for sharing information freely include rapid development of science and benefit of humanity, I believe it should not be solicited without pay because information needs finance and security. Scientific breakthroughs can be achieved faster and more when people do not need to have the financial backing to acquire the necessary knowledge. There are many smart scientists who do not have the funds to acquire important information to complete their research. However, when the information is free, this is not a barrier for their progress. For instance, information on cancer can be accessed freely on the internet, and this allowed Dr. James Cornick, a poor physician in Ireland, to come up with a pill which helps cure skin cancer and benefits people around the world. Even though in this situation free knowledge is beneficial, it is not true in all cases. Much information requires payment to be produced and maintain. Also, certain types of information in the wrong hands can be devastating for society. There are many professionals whose jobs are to produce research and new concepts. When they are not paid for this work, they can no longer generate science. In addition, some of this research deals with dangerous fields such as nuclear physics and pharmaceuticals. For instance, last year an act of terror occurred because some criminals were able to learn how to make explosives using free information on the internet. This clearly should not be permitted, and for this reason alone, not all information should be free to access for everyone. In conclusion, distributing information free of charge can help in certain aspects, but can also be detrimental to society. Although some believe people should give as much knowledge pro Bono as possible, I strongly believe the opposite. People should be careful to underestimate the value and power of knowledge.
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many
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people
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that by sharing
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information
freely
among all humanity, the future of the world
is enhanced
. Although
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some
reasons for sharing
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information
freely
include rapid development of science and benefit of humanity, I
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believe
it should not
be solicited
without pay
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because
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information
needs finance and security.

Scientific breakthroughs can
be achieved
faster and more when
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people
do not need to have the financial backing to acquire the necessary
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knowledge
. There are
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many
smart scientists who do not have the funds to acquire
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important
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information
to complete their research.
However
, when the
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information
is
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free
, this is not a barrier for their progress.
For instance
,
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information
on cancer can
be accessed
freely
on the internet, and this
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allowed
Dr. James
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Cornick
, a poor physician in Ireland, to
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come
up with a pill which
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helps
cure skin cancer and benefits
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people
around the world.
Even though
in this situation
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free
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knowledge
is beneficial, it is not true in all cases.

Much
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information
requires payment to
be produced
and maintain.
Also
, certain types of
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information
in the
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wrong
hands can be devastating for society. There are
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many
professionals whose jobs are to produce research and new concepts. When they are not paid for this work, they can no longer generate science.
In addition
,
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some
of this research deals with
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dangerous
fields such as nuclear physics and pharmaceuticals.
For instance
, last year an act of terror occurred
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because
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some
criminals were able to learn how to
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make
explosives using
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free
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information
on the internet. This
clearly
should not
be permitted
, and
for this reason
alone, not all
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information
should be
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free
to access for everyone.

In conclusion
, distributing
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information
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free
of charge can
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help
in certain aspects,
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but
can
also
be detrimental to society. Although
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some
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believe
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people
should give as much
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knowledge
pro Bono as possible, I
strongly
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believe
the opposite.
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People
should be careful to underestimate the value and power of
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knowledge
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
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