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Some people beliebe that it is good to share to as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views an v.2

Some people beliebe that it is good to share to as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. 2
In today' s world, due to the development of technology, people are able to share the vast amount of information. Even in science, business and academic world. Although some think that the openness in that fields is necessary for our lifestyle, I would urge general public not to intrude their research' s freedom. There is an opinion that the confidential documents are needed to allow citizens to access so that a person who contributes in making world peaceful, better and convenient could be recognized the effort. For example, there are many famous activists, artists, scientists who died not to be known because of poverty, pressure etc. If their contribution had been identified earlier, people would have lived in the more advanced community. Because of this, it is essential to be said prevalently regarding precious information. However, on the other side of this argument, it must be remembered that the research materials could be used in different intention, unlike the expert' s one. For instance, Albert Einstein invented the theory of relativity which resulted in developing an atomic bomb. Furthermore, there may be a possibility not to ensure the professionals' privacy. Alan Turing, who is the father of computer science. At that time, England did not recognize homosexuality so his great work was hidden just because of his privacy. Thus this makes it clear why sharing the information leads to significant danger both our world and individual. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for against the permission of crucial report by distributing whoever they are. But I convinced that since they have discretionary power, people should not spread highly classified data as they please.
In
today&
#039; s
world
, due to the development of technology,
people
are able to share the vast amount of information. Even in science, business and academic
world
. Although
some
think
that the openness in that fields is necessary for our lifestyle, I would urge
general public
not to intrude their
research&
#039; s freedom.

There is an opinion that the confidential documents
are needed
to
allow
citizens to access
so
that a person who contributes in making
world
peaceful, better and convenient could
be recognized
the effort.
For example
, there are
many
famous
activists, artists, scientists who
died
not to
be known
because
of poverty, pressure etc. If their contribution had
been identified
earlier,
people
would have
lived
in the more advanced community.
Because of this
, it is essential to
be said
prevalently
regarding precious information.

However
, on the other side of this argument, it
must
be remembered
that the research materials could be
used
in
different
intention, unlike the
expert&
#039; s one.
For instance
, Albert Einstein invented the theory of relativity which resulted in developing an atomic bomb.
Furthermore
, there may be a possibility not to ensure the
professionals&
#039; privacy. Alan Turing, who is the father of computer science. At that time, England did not recognize homosexuality
so
his great work
was hidden
just
because
of his privacy.
Thus
this
makes
it
clear
why sharing the information leads to significant
danger
both our
world
and individual.

In conclusion
, there are convincing arguments both for against the permission of crucial report by distributing whoever they are.
But
I convinced that since they have discretionary power,
people
should not spread
highly
classified data as they
please
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people beliebe that it is good to share to as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. 2

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4 paragraphs
274 words
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