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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v.43

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 43
In today's modern world, most of the people spend a majority of their lifetime working. Therefore, some people assert that job satisfaction plays an important role in moulding a wellbeing individual. In this essay, we will examine what are the factors that lead to job satisfaction and how realistic is the demand for job satisfaction for all the employees. There are several main points that contribute to job satisfaction. To begin, a high salary is, undoubtedly, the key factor towards job satisfaction. People nowadays are becoming more status conscious and materialistic which lead them to the desires of buying things including the most up-to-date electronic gadgets for men and trendy handbags, shoes and dresses for women. It is due to the reason that they may want to get self-satisfaction after spending their precious time working for a company. However, high paid job is not always available and it is nearly impossible to offer it to all the workers owing to the reason that the profit of a company made may not be able to cover all the expenditure of a company. In addition, a good welfare system of an organisation is, admittedly, the major concern of the employees. If every company is able to guarantee to pay the retirees a huge amount of pension, it will unquestionably allow every employee to get satisfied with their jobs. With the well-organised welfare system, every retired will not be a burden to their family, in return, they still can help to support their family financially. Nevertheless, it is not provided by every company to pay pensions to every retired of their company as they may not have extra money as they have to make preparations for the unanticipated financial problems of their company. In conclusion, although there are numerous factors that contribute to one's job satisfaction, not all the companies are able to fulfil their employees' demands. I believe that every individual can get satisfied with their jobs one day in the near future as long as our nation continues to prosper and flourish.
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spend a majority of their lifetime working.
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some
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people
assert that
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job
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satisfaction
plays an
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important
role in
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wellbeing
individual. In this essay, we will examine what are the factors that lead to
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job
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satisfaction
and how realistic is the demand for
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job
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satisfaction
for all the employees.

There are several main points that contribute to
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job
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satisfaction
. To
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begin
, a high salary is,
undoubtedly
, the key factor towards
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job
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satisfaction
.
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People
nowadays are becoming more status conscious and materialistic which lead them to the desires of buying things including the most up-to-date electronic gadgets for
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men
and trendy handbags, shoes and dresses for women. It is due to the reason that they may want to
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get
self-satisfaction after spending their precious time working for a
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company
.
However
, high paid
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job
is not always available and it is
nearly
impossible to offer it to all the workers owing to the reason that the profit of a
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company
made may not be able to cover all the expenditure of a
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company
.

In addition
, a
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good
welfare system of an
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organisation
is,
admittedly
, the major concern of the employees. If every
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company
is able to guarantee to pay the retirees a huge amount of pension, it will
unquestionably
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allow
every employee to
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get
satisfied with their
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jobs
. With the
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well-organised
welfare system, every retired will not be a burden to their family, in return, they
still
can
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help
to support their family
financially
.
Nevertheless
, it is not provided by every
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company
to pay pensions to every retired of their
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company
as they may not have extra money as they
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have to
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make
preparations for the unanticipated financial problems of their
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company
.

In conclusion
, although there are numerous factors that contribute to one's
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job
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satisfaction
, not all the
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companies
are able to fulfil their employees' demands. I believe that every individual can
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get
satisfied with their
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jobs
one day in the near future as long as our nation continues to prosper and flourish.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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