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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v.39

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 39
Human life is divided into three phases. Out of which an adult phase is the most energetic and enthusiastic one. In this phase, the majority of the time is spent at work so the job satisfaction is very important. Although the factors related to it varies from person to person. Learning is a constant process in a person's life. Though the job looks monotonous after some time, learning never stops. This could be one of the reasons that a person can never say that he knows everything related to his work field. For example, Mr Bill gates cannot say that he knows everything about computers. A challenging and responsible work would increase the desire of learning. This is certainly the most important factor of a job satisfaction. For instance, Pranav Mistry mentioned in one of his interviews regarding the successful presentation of 3G, that he started the project because he felt it was an extremely challenging and socially responsible assignment. Another important factor could be setting up the goals. A goal is the first step towards the destination. Thru focused attitude even the toughest goals could be achieved. For example, I did not know excel macro while I was in college. However, now I am working on that in my job. This could happen just because I had a goal to learn it after college. One more important factor could be appreciation. Most of the employee expects a confirmation that their hard work is being noticed. For instance, an award or a certificate could boost the confidence and it could motivate the employee to work on the next goal. I believe the job satisfaction should be very important for everyone because a job is not a short-term mission. It is very difficult to continue uninteresting work for a longer period.
Human life
is divided
into three phases. Out of which an adult phase is the most energetic and enthusiastic one. In this phase, the majority of the time
is spent
at
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work
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so
the
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job
satisfaction is
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very
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important
.
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Although
the
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factors
related to it varies from person to person.

Learning is a constant process in a person's life. Though the
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job
looks monotonous after
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some
time, learning never
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stops
. This could be one of the reasons that a person can never say that he knows everything related to his
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work
field.
For example
, Mr
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Bill gates
cannot say that he knows everything about computers. A challenging and responsible
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work
would increase the desire of learning. This is
certainly
the most
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important
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factor
of a
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job
satisfaction.
For instance
,
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Pranav
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Mistry
mentioned in one of his interviews regarding the successful presentation of 3G, that he
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started
the project
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because
he felt it was an
extremely
challenging and
socially
responsible assignment.

Another
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important
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factor
could be setting up the
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goals
. A
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goal
is the
first
step towards the destination.
The word 'thru' is informal. Consider replacing it with "through".
Thru
focused attitude even the toughest
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goals
could
be achieved
.
For example
, I did not know excel macro while I was in college.
However
,
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now
I am working on that in my
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job
. This could happen
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just
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because
I had a
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goal
to learn it after college. One more
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important
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factor
could be appreciation. Most of the employee
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expects
a confirmation that their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
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work
is
being noticed
.
For instance
, an award or a certificate could boost the confidence and it could motivate the employee to
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work
on the
next
goal.

I believe the
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job
satisfaction should be
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very
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important
for everyone
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because
a
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job
is not a short-term mission. It is
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very
difficult to continue uninteresting
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work
for a longer period.
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. v. 39

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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