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Your Saturday hasn't Overseas shouldn't buy a University. you want some information for you to go to university right to a student officer in your letter. Add him / her about the accommodation. The transportation facilitiesThe class schedule v.2

Your Saturday hasn't Overseas shouldn't buy a University. you want some information for you to go to university right to a student officer in your letter. Add him / her about the accommodation. The transportation facilitiesThe class schedule v. 2
Dear Sir< br> < br> I recently take admission in your esteemed University for the MBA course which commencing this September. The purpose of mine to penning down epistol is to you to seek the information about living facility, transport and class schedules etcetera before coming to Australia. < br> < br> As I am the native dweller of India and before it, I could& nbsp; not come Australia due to this I will novice to the ambience of Australia. Hence, I would like to know about the accommodation facilities which are given by you to an& nbsp; overseas student whether the university offers halls of residence or students have to find flats themselves? Apart from this, if student is living in a flat of a nearby society& nbsp; then what transportation facilities available there. I have tried to find out on the Internet but all my efforts are gone to vain because I could not get the proper data from it. < br> < br> Moreover, & nbsp; I could also like to know about the class schedules properly that when the classes would ushered in so that I will come there before you embarked the session. < br> < br> I would be very grateful if you give the details of these things as early as possible so that in future I would not face the major hurdles during my study and able to combat with them to ward off myself from critical situations. < br> < br> I look forward to hearing from. < br> < br> Yours faithfully& nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; 8th febraury 2018< br> < br> & nbsp; Aman
Dear Sir< br>

< br>

I recently take admission in your esteemed University for the MBA course which commencing this September. The purpose of mine to penning down epistol is to you to seek the information about living facility, transport and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
schedules etcetera
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
coming to Australia. < br>

< br>

As I am the native dweller of India and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it, I could& nbsp; not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
Australia due to this I will novice to the ambience of Australia.
Hence
, I would like to know about the accommodation facilities which are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by you to an& nbsp; overseas student whether the university offers halls of residence or students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
find flats themselves? Apart from this, if student is living in a flat of a nearby society& nbsp; then what transportation facilities available there. I have tried to find out on the Internet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
all my efforts
are gone
to vain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the proper data from it. < br>

< br>

Moreover
, & nbsp; I could
also
like to know about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
schedules
properly
that when the classes would ushered in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
you embarked the session. < br>

< br>

I would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
grateful if you give the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of these things as early as possible
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that in future I would not face the major hurdles during my study and able to combat with them to ward off myself from critical situations. < br>

< br>

I look forward to hearing from. < br>

< br>

Yours
faithfully
& nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; & nbsp; 8th febraury 2018< br>

< br>

& nbsp; Aman
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS letter Your Saturday hasn't Overseas shouldn't buy a University. you want some information for you to go to university right to a student officer in your letter. Add him / her about the accommodation. The transportation facilitiesThe class schedule v. 2

Letter
  American English
15 paragraphs
321 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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