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You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: Explain why you changed your previous jobDescribe your new jobTell him/her your other news. v.6

You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: Explain why you changed your previous jobDescribe your new jobTell him/her your other news. v. 6
Dear Sandra, I' m writing this letter to tell you some news which has happened in my life. First of all, remember that time you helped me to upgrade my resume? Well, I sent it to a company in downtown applying for a position. Last Monday, they informed me that I got the job. You know that I wasn' t being well-paid and it was hard for me to pay all my bills. My activities in the new job didn' t change at all, and I get home one hour earlier. Besides, not only my workmates are friendly and funny, but also is my boss. Finally, I need to tell you more some news. My sister is pregnant! My mom is so excited about her first grandchild. Actually, all the members of my family are anxious about the birth. I' m looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes, Márcia.
Dear Sandra,

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some
news which has happened in my life.

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First of all
, remember that time you
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helped
me to upgrade my resume? Well, I
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sent
it to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in downtown applying for a position. Last Monday, they informed me that I
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got
the job. You know that I
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wasn&
#039; t being well-paid and it was
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hard
for me to pay all my bills.

My activities in the new job
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didn&
#039; t
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change
at all, and I
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get
home one hour earlier.
Besides
, not
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only
my workmates are friendly and
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funny
,
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but
also
is my boss.

Finally
, I need to
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tell
you more
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some
news. My sister is pregnant! My mom is
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so
excited about her
first
grandchild. Actually, all the members of my family are anxious about the birth.

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I&
#039; m looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Best wishes,

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Márcia
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6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: Explain why you changed your previous jobDescribe your new jobTell him/her your other news. v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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