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You are going on a short training course at a college. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation. describe the accommodation you require. say when you wi v.2

You are going on a short training course at a college. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation. describe the accommodation you require. say when you wi v. 2
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am doomed to my current living conditions in the hostel. I have no major concerns with my room per se however, my housemate has made my life miserable to continue living here. I hope you will consider my request genuine. Let me first explain my situation. It all started when my new housemate moved in to stay with me here. Prior to that everything was cordial between me and my old roommate. My current roommate is up all night and parties with intolerably loud music. I have tried to sort things out by communicating with her on many occasions, but sadly all efforts in vain. Now it is impossible for me to sleep properly hence affecting studies and work by lowering my concentration levels. Would you kindly transfer me or my roommate to a different accommodation? I would prefer to live in with a more considerate and quieter person. As long as the room is peaceful to study and work, I don' t mind with whom I share. Thank you for consideration. Your Faithfully, Diana
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I
am doomed
to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
living conditions in the hostel. I have no major concerns with my room per se
however
, my housemate has made my life miserable to continue living here.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you will consider my request genuine.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
first
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
my situation. It all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
when my new housemate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
in to stay with me here. Prior to that everything was cordial between me and my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
roommate. My
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
roommate is up all night and parties with
intolerably
loud music. I have tried to sort things out by communicating with her on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
occasions,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
sadly
all efforts in vain.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
it is impossible for me to sleep
properly
hence
affecting studies and work by lowering my concentration levels.

Would you kindly transfer me or my roommate to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
accommodation? I would prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in with a more considerate and quieter person. As long as the room is peaceful to study and work, I
Possible spelling mistake found.
don&
#039; t mind with whom I share.

Thank you for consideration.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Faithfully
,

Diana
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation. describe the accommodation you require. say when you wi v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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