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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what v.1

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what v. 1
Dear Mr Sam, I am John, father of Sophie William, who is an eighth standard student in your school. I am writing this letter to let you know that, as you are exploring parents, who could accompany your students on the International trip to France, I would like to nominate myself for this. There are two main reasons that are strong enough to prove my eligibility for this task. Firstly, as I am a native French speaker, I can easily act as a translator between children and the French people. This would ease their stay in France. Also, as I have lived my childhood in Paris, I can take the kids around and show them places of their interests. Moreover, I am aware that there is a tremendous difference between the cultures of the two countries, I will make sure that each student gets involved in most of the local activities and learn from their culture. In addition, I would also ensure their safety and security, along with this I would make sure that they have a proper diet and an adequate sleep. To plan the tour, I would like to get some basic information from you like the number of students travelling, the departure date, agenda of travel and the tenure of stay. Hoping to get a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, John William
Dear Mr Sam,

I am John, father of Sophie William, who is an eighth standard
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student
in your school. I am writing this letter to
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you know that, as you are exploring parents, who could accompany your
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students
on the International trip to France, I would like to nominate myself for this.

There are two main reasons that are strong
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enough
to prove my eligibility for this task.
Firstly
, as I am a native French speaker, I can
easily
act as a translator between children and the French
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people
. This would
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ease
their stay in France.
Also
, as I have
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lived
my childhood in Paris, I can take the kids around and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
them places of their interests.

Moreover
, I am aware that there is a tremendous difference between the cultures of the two countries, I will
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make
sure that each
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student
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gets
involved in most of the local activities and learn from their culture.
In addition
, I would
also
ensure their safety and security, along with this I would
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make
sure that they have a proper diet and an adequate sleep.

To plan the tour, I would like to
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get
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some
basic information from you like the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
travelling, the departure date, agenda of travel and the tenure of stay.

Hoping to
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get
a
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positive
response from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

John William
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
225 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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