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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter1. give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre2. explain why the sports an v.7

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter1. give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre2. explain why the sports an v. 7
Dear Sir or Madam, I was informed by my friend that you intend to close a leisure centre to save your spending. I am writing this letter to suggest you to cancel your plan. My friends and friends play sports and participate in a variety of leisure activities in this centre frequently. For instance, I prefer to play badminton in the sports centre and my friends are likely to go to the gym on weekends. Therefore, it is unquestionable that this sports centre plays an important role in relieving our pressure. On the other hand, it is also crucial to the local residents. First of all, it is the only leisure place in this rural area. We must travel a long distance to the urbane area to do leisure activities if the centre closes. In addition, the centre is also considered as a indispensable part of the cultural legacy in this area, as it has been there for many years. If you shut down the centre, it will result in a frenzy of our local people, as you action interfere with our lives. Furthermore, the image of local council will also be jeopardized and people will lose faith on you. In the light of such facts, you would be better to maintain the centre. I hope that my suggestions will be of some assistance. If you require further information, you can contact me by email. Your sincerely, David Villa.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I
was informed
by my
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friend
that you intend to close a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
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centre
to save your spending. I am writing this letter to suggest you to cancel your plan.

My
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friends
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
play sports and participate in a variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
activities in this
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centre
frequently
.
For instance
, I prefer to play badminton in the sports
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centre
and my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
are likely to go to the gym on weekends.
Therefore
, it is unquestionable that this sports
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centre
plays an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in relieving our pressure.

On the other hand
, it is
also
crucial to the local residents.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
place in this rural area. We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
travel a long distance to the urbane area to do
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leisure
activities if the
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centre
closes.
In addition
, the
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centre
is
also
considered as
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
indispensable part of the cultural legacy in this area, as it has been there for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years.

If you shut down the
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
, it will result in a frenzy of our local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, as you action interfere with our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
Furthermore
, the image of local council will
also
be jeopardized
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will lose faith on you. In the light of such facts, you would be better to maintain the
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
.

I hope that my suggestions will be of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
assistance. If you require
further
information, you can contact me by email.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

David Villa.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages knows nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS letter Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter1. give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre2. explain why the sports an v. 7

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
239 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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