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Your office building doesn’t have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter-Explain the problem-Suggest a solution-Say why parking will benefit all employees v.2

Your office building doesn’t have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter-Explain the problem-Suggest a solution-Say why parking will benefit all employees v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to say my concern about car park. We have a lot of problems when we come to company with our cars, because of the lack of parking space we have to park our cars along a street or anywhere far from the main building. Cars are fined by police or stolen by theft every day, and due to this problem, we do not have enough concentration during the work time. The next problem is about time, in winter we should put or cars in some covering parking located in street no15, hence we should walk to office, so we arrive here with 15-minute delay every day. I investigated around the company and found a big land next to our office. I think you can have a negotiation with landlord about hiring his land. It is obvious that having parking near the main building has enormous advantages for the company. The first one is about your staff’s convenience. If they have a relief, they can have high performance during the work, I mean that their efficiency will be increased. The next one is about getting to work on time. Staff start their work without delay, so they can work more time and it is good for company. Your prompt response would be highly appreciated. Faithfully yours,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to say my concern about
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car
park. We have
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a lot of
problems when we
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come
to
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company
with our
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cars
,
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because
of the lack of parking space we
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have to
park our
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cars
along a street or anywhere far from the main building.
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Cars
are fined
by police or stolen by theft every day, and due to this problem, we do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
concentration during the
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work
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time
. The
next
problem is about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, in winter we should put or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in
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some
covering parking located in street no15,
hence
we should walk to office,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we arrive here with 15-minute delay every day.

I investigated around the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and found a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
land
next
to our office. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you can have a negotiation with landlord about hiring his land. It is obvious that having parking near the main building has enormous advantages for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. The
first
one is about your staff’s convenience. If they have a relief, they can have high performance during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, I mean that their efficiency will
be increased
. The
next
one is about getting to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. Staff
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
their
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work
without delay,
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so
they can
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work
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Your prompt response would be
highly
appreciated.

Faithfully
yours,
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your office building doesn’t have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter-Explain the problem-Suggest a solution-Say why parking will benefit all employees v. 2

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
222 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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